The seeds were set
A Poem by Samuel Jack
The seeds were set.
Put a-shaking in the ground
Success was not certain
an effect often found
Many different outcomes
Stunted or full growth
transferring will power
amounts to sullen hope
The wanting is what drives it
But doesn't make it so
Up your tools
Ignore the fools
Carve a path right true
The wanting is what drives it
But it comes down to what you do
© 2013 Samuel Jack
Author's Note
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Any improvements welcome
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Reviews
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It's a multifaceted poem.....simplistic & Charming...
"Many different outcomes
Stunted or full growth
transferring will power
amounts to sullen hope "
this was the turning point for me...I could have given a different ending though yours is admirable too..
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you, it was fun to write.
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11 Years Ago
Thank you Zainul, thats what I wanted to convey, great review.
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11 Years Ago
You are most welcome,Samuel.:)
I feel very glad to know your intention.:)
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11 Years Ago
Thanks, I tried to use meter for this one, I don't always and I know it doesn't make a poem alone, b.. read moreThanks, I tried to use meter for this one, I don't always and I know it doesn't make a poem alone, but it can make it very pleasant to the eyes and mind. Its part of the art of poetry
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11 Years Ago
You did it really well.
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11 Years Ago
Thank you Rita! I'm always double glad when you're happy with a piece, it's like an A+ from a teache.. read moreThank you Rita! I'm always double glad when you're happy with a piece, it's like an A+ from a teacher!
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11 Years Ago
Gracias! I think I will take your advice on the last line, it does slow that last bit down. Your a t.. read moreGracias! I think I will take your advice on the last line, it does slow that last bit down. Your a true poet and a lady (in the old fashioned way, there's no question of your gender!) thank you
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Added on June 10, 2013
Last Updated on June 10, 2013
Author
Samuel JackBirmingham, West Midlands, United Kingdom
About
I'm from the industrial wasteland that is England, I'm very passionate about poetry, while not being very educated on the subject. So constructive criticism is more than welcome.
I like poetry, for.. more..
Writing
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