The seeds were set

The seeds were set.
Put a-shaking in the ground

Success was not certain
an effect often found

Many different outcomes
Stunted or full growth

transferring will power
amounts to sullen hope

The wanting is what drives it
But doesn't make it so

Up your tools
Ignore the fools
Carve a path right true

The wanting is what drives it

But it comes down to what you do

Author's Note

Any improvements welcome

Reviews

[Shweta Singh]

It's a multifaceted poem.....simplistic & Charming...
"Many different outcomes
Stunted or full growth

transferring will power
amounts to sullen hope "
this was the turning point for me...I could have given a different ending though yours is admirable too..

[Samuel Jack]

Thank you, it was fun to write.

[zainul]

This piece allows me to visualize the whole actions surrounding the sowing of seed.
I quickly remembered the old saying,"As you sow,so you will reap".
Love the whole piece with its wonderful message.

[Samuel Jack]

Thank you Zainul, thats what I wanted to convey, great review.

[zainul]

You are most welcome,Samuel.:)
I feel very glad to know your intention.:)

[Zahra]

I liked it, it flows really good. Nicely done.

[Samuel Jack]

Thanks, I tried to use meter for this one, I don't always and I know it doesn't make a poem alone, but it can make it very pleasant to the eyes and mind. Its part of the art of poetry

[Zahra]

You did it really well.

[Rita L. Sev]

I really like this - the sense of wanting; while there are no guarantees, nothing will grow without that initial desire. Well penned!

[Samuel Jack]

Thank you Rita! I'm always double glad when you're happy with a piece, it's like an A+ from a teacher!

[Rita L. Sev]

:)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I quite enjoyed this piece. You have a distinct idea/concept and you followed that throughout the entire piece; ending with a stellar message.

The wanting is what drives it
But it comes down to what you do --My favorite lines--though from a technical standpoint, I would group them into a couplet instead of individual lines to keep the flow a little more structured.

Overall, the imagery was great, the metaphor was strong and the concept was fantastic. I truly enjoyed this read!

[Samuel Jack]

Gracias! I think I will take your advice on the last line, it does slow that last bit down. Your a true poet and a lady (in the old fashioned way, there's no question of your gender!) thank you