Alone

Everyone is here

except me.

They laugh and cry,

I live a lie.

Melodies blare!

Words hang in the air -

going nowhere

Me?

I just stare -

fully aware

that

(we) 

are all alone.

Reviews

[Alias]

The form of this is really effective, would be great performance poetry I bet! Really brings across the feeling of being isolated even when you aren't technically alone. My only critique is that you could really explore this feeling of isolation, expand it to more than one setting perhaps - don't hold back.

[PortraitsOfTheHeart]

Thank you!

[Inda]

Indeed, in the end we are all alone. This is short, but poignant. love it!

[PortraitsOfTheHeart]

Thank you!

[DoormanDan]

I really like the fragmented approach this piece takes. Sometimes, messages can be delivered more powerfully with fewer words as opposed to more, and this, I feel, is one of those times. I could feel the emotion behind this piece; there really is a sense of loneliness being generated here. There really isn't much else I can say in terms of praise or advice, as this is a rather short and minimalistic poem, so I'll just end by saying great job. :)

[PortraitsOfTheHeart]

Thank you :)