Paradise

A bit of stream of consciousness writing. No thought went into this.

I open my door,

Stepping into the wide space,

Heaven's boulevard

Has no face.

Reviews

[DoormanDan]

For a mere stream of writing, this is pretty good. It's not the best thing I've ever seen, but it certainly isn't the worst. I really liked the entire poem overall (especially the last two lines), but the line I feel could use some tweaking is the second one. It's not bad, it's just a bit too vague to really deliver a powerful impact (something you generally want to strive for in most lines in poems this short). Other than that, I think this piece is strong. Not bad for something you say no thought went into! :)

[PortraitsOfTheHeart]

Thank you!

[Giulia King]

Short but still left me thinking. Beautiful!

[PortraitsOfTheHeart]

Thank you!

[Tazeen Ahmed]

beautiful lines!
short lines captured with truth...

[PortraitsOfTheHeart]

Thank you!

[Coyote Poetry]

A interesting ending. Left the reader with something to think about. Heaven's boulevard. Mystical place needing more description. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[PortraitsOfTheHeart]

Thank you!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.