Your Dream is my Life

Believe  in Yourself to  come  true  dream in life.

You need  to  maintain the confidence, beloved  every time

One day someone can Hug you so tight

You  are the one for someone make to smile

Someone  wants to you for forever in this life

You need to  one life, one dream, one smile forever in life

What are your choice  for her, choice of value in her life

You can activate  yourself be  moral and value in  her life

She also wants to sing life song in your hug with a smile every time

Dream is  the   visible aspect to alive you in her life

Life is a treasure of feeling, of the dream, of each value  life

Need to care with secured for converting dream in real life.

  

Reviews

[Minnie]

Calm and true thoughts, its wonderful writing.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Nice thoughts at times seems a little disjointed in flow.
I like the value of emotions and the focus.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Samparks. sam,
Fun to see anothers viewpoint of life and love. Dreams are important and you have given it a voice in your poem. Dream and goal seem to walk together in this poem as well. Bless you Kathy

[Poet]

There are a few misplaced uses of the word "to." I like the message-a positive reminder to be good to your partner. We all need to here more words like that.

[Beautiful Mistake]

The over all message and emotion is wonderful. But it is a little hard to just fully enjoy with the misplaced and missing words between lines. Also I thought the line "one day someone could hold you so tight" could've had a follow up line. That would've given the poem more warmth. It is cute that you set it up so we are reading it as if we are in the guy's head

[Dr. YumnaKay]

The theme here is good enough.. The only hurdle in understanding the full blast of it is the little mistakes in between the sentences which interrupt the flow in your composition.. The lines are scattered haphazardly.. But I like the meaning described here...

[Celie Rose]

Love your poem. Converting dreams into real life are important. "She also wants to sing life's song in hugs and smiles every time. Nicely written and well expressed feelings. Keep up the good writing.

[horizon]

True words for watching dreams and making them real...loving someone and also caring for them...