Why I not fly

Your every step will teach me about the life

You have my feeling I feel so nice

I want to see fly in the sky as  a butterfly

Your strength makes me crazy

You maintain it's in my life

You are my only way, why I don't fly

The beauty of life

I want to feel it after kiss you several times

Reviews

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Sam, you are very close to mastering the English
language. Do you have the opportunity of studying English
at a University in India? Your poem is very romantic, however,
the last line could be more subtle. You might write, as an example,
"You are to me a caress of an ocean breeze". truly, Pat

[Celie Rose]

Your poem is lovely. I can feel the love
and anticipated romance in your words.
"You have my feeling I feel so nice
want to see fly in the sky as a butterfly
Your strength makes me crazy."
Nicely written and beautifully expressed.
Keep writing.

[Drcicarlo]

After reading, i understand this is about romance and love. I am sorry to say it took me a while to fully comprehend the message, but as a poet i always keep in mind that poetry is like artwork. The lines may not be straight, but everyone sees a meaning differently. If you have intentions of expanding your audience i would suggest to read your poetry out loud before you immediately send your piece. I have found in the past that having a mentor to listen to my poems helped me significantly, and i hope that you can find the same. Otherwise, your mind and heart are the right places, because poetry requires desire. You certainly have desire. Keep working!