The Lifestyle

The life style behaves as per mind

You can't change it

It's given you by god this time

What good and bad analysis this time

God will handle you when you move wrong side

The Act is God, you decide this time

The Smile is beside you, you get chance collect nice

Life is happy Smile every time

Every one helps you, if you decide right

The Man is human, mistake happen in life

Mistake if innocently can rewrite every time

Mistake if intentionally do not hope any correct right

Life is Human You save this every time

I am for you, You try to recognize my feeling nice

You are my Mirror, I see it every time

Reviews

[Polly]

This is a beautiful poem, but you need to work on your sentence structure and capitalization. The poem is titled 'The Lifestyle' with no space between 'life' and 'style'. so you don't need a space between 'life' and 'style' in the first sentence. Everywhere in the poem, you capitalized God, but the second sentence.

'Mistake if innocently can rewrite every time
Mistake if intentionally do not hope any correct right'

This paragraph doesn't make sense. Consider rephrasing it?

'Life is Human You save this every time
I am for you, You try to recognize my feeling nice
You are my Mirror, I see it every time'

I feel these sentences don't relate to the poem at all, but maybe that's just me.

I think I understand what you're trying to say in this poem, but I can't understand what you wrote. The message, however, was amazing. Keep it up!

[Valette]

this is an interesting poem, though a bit difficult to understand. I think I can just grasp the general concept here. I would recommend taking the jewels out and putting them in a new setting- I do not believe the centered setting works too well with the random line lengths here.