My Life Race

With you

Where is the life, What I can say

Their and here, I am in the race

I never want to confuse in the race

Where you decide, then finished the race

My Life race when  starts you not in the race

Your shadow inspires me to come the race

You behind me every time in the race

You make me crazy in the race

This is a great achievement in your life

Only I was running for you in the race

Your  liking in my life spread the craze

My mind is counting your every moment in the race

I  determined to for win the race

I was well aware of  my destination in the race

My  life theme is so sweet for you in the race

In reality, I was in feeling  that you win sure  in the race.

You know well about the race, Your life near you in the race

When moment of happiness of the life in end the race

You were my achievement I win in the race.

Now our life race will continue to each other

Every time in whole   life we with smile for us in the race

Reviews

[Tionge Rosalie Johnson]

There are some spelling and grammatical errors you need to work on, like for instance "their" should be spelled "there." But these things are very minor and easy to fix and work on.

I do love this concept though, and the flow is smooth and concise.

[Ellen Kolman]

Excellent poem dear Sam...I loved it...hugs

[Celie Rose]

Enjoyed reading your poem.
Good theme throughout your poem. I
love the concept of life and love as your race.
deep emotion. I feel the longing, hope and
expectation.
It is nicely written and expressed.
"In reality, I was in feeling that you win sure
in the race.You know well about the race,
Your life near you in the race
When moment of happiness of the life
in end the race
You were my achievement I win in the race."
I also like the last two lines,
"Now our life race will continue to each other
Every time in whole life we with smile for us
in the race."
Keep up the good work.