Keep you Smile

The God made you why so nice. 

I can claim with the Right

After making you, God thinks so nice

Who can Deserved for your smile

The question is selection still nice

The queue was so long, Who is nice

The Earth is so busy, difficult in deciding

Million of prayers for you How it determines

The god wants serve the opportunity

Who deserve for you, keep happy, you every time

The moments of selection is start very nice

The God start the selection from the end of the queue

I was jumped of joy with so more nice 

I was the last fellow of the long queue this is  nice.

God, doesn't need  further, decide me for your care to with a smile

Sam, you are the  lucky fellow, respect me every time

You are the right decision, My mind feels every time

Now you became my life priority, will  keep you happy in life

 

Reviews

[Tionge Rosalie Johnson]

this was so sweet! Whoever holds your heart is a lucky one indeed. I love how you throw religion in there, it mixes with the theme of your poem so well!

[tiya]

That is so so expressive. Really ejoyed the read. Thank you!

[Ellen Kolman]

Beautiful poem...the woman who holds your heart is lucky indeed...you are certainly in love and grateful for her........thank you! hugs

[Celie Rose]

I like this poem. The dedication is heartfelt and nicely expressed.. critique: I have come to understand your writing style. Be careful of spelling errors, commas, capitalization, and the use of periods at the end of sentences. Overall you are doing a good job. Deserved...deserved. Who is nice...who is nice. The god wants...The God wants, I was jumped of joy...I jumped with joy...My mind feels every time...my mind feels. Keep writing!

[RaeAlyn]

The poem has a very hard to understand rhythm. It's hard to really get into the beat of the poem. There also seem to be many errors, grammatical mostly. I'm sure if you looked back at it you would see what I mean.

[Sammie]

It is very beautiful Sam. Your words describe so much beauty and careful crafting. A long but worthwhile wait. You have a wonderful talent with you or words my friend. Never waste it always paint the picture of what you feel with them.

[Bidya Palai]

It seems like a proposal is being dedicated to someone in your poem ...its too lovely.. ☺