Moment of your presence

Life is Achieved

The Great movement of your presence

I realized when my life quietly in nicely

We are far away, but feel each nicely

We still recognize each other nicely

Our understanding Moving ahead quietly

We recognized the every moment Nicely

We want to accept every moment nicely

We wonder for each how it happens nicely

We are always being aware our relation nicely

We are still holding our feeling with share nicely

We are now in the position not hold more nicely

We are now in consideration how I feel her nicely

I am sure about her assistance for me timely

The feeling of her company attention to me nicely

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Tionge Rosalie Johnson]

I love the way this poem opens, "the great movement of your presence," gets me into the mood of the piece.

[RaeAlyn]

"quietly in nicely", two adverbs so close together do not make sense in this instance. Your use of adverbs to end every line is very distracting. Your words flow freely, that is good in writing.

[Celie Rose]

Enjoyed your poem.
We are all divided in time.
Whether it is different time zones
that can make it difficult to communicate,
maybe a heavy work load or spending time family.
These can be time consuming.
I feel the longing. I have hope that
things will get better.
"I am sure about her assistance for me timely
The feeling of her company attention to me nicely"
Nicely written.

[Sammie]

Awe. So sweet the message here. I can really feel the deep longing for every new moment and experience. But I feel the appreciation for her. The flow is good. Straight from the heart. The way you repeat certain phrases shows what is important and doesn't really seem like a repeat. Very nicely done. Thank you for sharing. For being bold enough to give so much of your heart. Great work my friend great work.