Angel

Bloody bones

High-pitched tones

 

Angel of darkness

Angel of death

Angel of the helpless

Angel of breathe

 

Angel of darkness

All light has fled

Enemies left faceless

For his league of undead

Author's Note

I don't really know what this is.... i thought of the first bit awhile ago and i added the rest....

Reviews

[E. Ryan Miller]

I like this poem for its repetitions. Really good job with that. Just one typo: "Breathe" should probably be "breath" to rhyme with "death".

[Sethnicity]

Seems like a FUN write.. ;)
Keep it up!

[Simmirose]

i actually saw the angels in my head... any ways great rhyme scheme, and the dark feeling to it! Excellent job

[Nicholas Antonio Young]

This is honestly really great. It's pretty provocative and keeps it short which is pretty hard to do sometimes. Good job

[Joshua David Vrana]

i like it, it makes me think of a curse the way it's writen

[House of Immite]

I actually like this. The opening is not informative enough of what's going on. But I like the progression of this. I think it has big potential if you can fix the first stanza one way or another.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem sound like a description of battle with no winners. I like the flow of thoughts and the interesting ending. I wonder what the dead discuss in the end. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Aravind]

Im not so sure about your opening... Maybe a little expansion on the bones there?

the second stanza just takes off beautifully.. The rhyming has created wonders, and good flow...

Try to edit the typo at"ANgel" and the word breathe i believe is breath here..

I am curious with the "his" here? I expected "her" ...LOL

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

Wow... um good definetly a good write but um...dark.