The war has begun

The war has begun

A Poem by xSamilynnx

With wings black as night

He soared high in the sky

His pride shining bright

As he watched us all die

The last one falls silently and alone

And his fallen take flight

Glowing silver his lead is spoken

His followers make sure

The dead arent woken

They sang their song

Loud and proud

They make sure nothing goes wrong

Theres writing in the halls

Its written in bloody red

Its dripping down the walls

And its pointing to the dead

The fallen will avenge

The angels rising again

Bringing the dead back

With a lycanthrope pack

The last of our kind

One stands firm

Hes ready to fight

Making the dark one squirm

He strikes with all his might

Power surges through his viens

Black and bloody as the world

He mas made his claim

The war has begun

The beasts come out

Millions against just one

© 2013 xSamilynnx


Author's Note

xSamilynnx
Ive wanted to write a fallen angel poem for a while... n ive finally done it!! thoughts? with help from a friend

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"Power surges through his veins" I think that this was a very good line and i liked this part of it the most! The poem kind of confused me as i was reading it but as you get towards the end it made more since and i like that! It leaves confusion which makes you want to read more and more and than by the end of the poem you understand. I think that you did well with this one :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

xSamilynnx

11 Years Ago

thank you!!!!



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I like your use of personification, giving wings and voices to the angels in the poem.


Posted 7 Months Ago


Very descriptive word choice. It makes a powerful and emotional impact towards the reader. I like it. Good Job.

Posted 11 Years Ago


"Power surges through his veins" I think that this was a very good line and i liked this part of it the most! The poem kind of confused me as i was reading it but as you get towards the end it made more since and i like that! It leaves confusion which makes you want to read more and more and than by the end of the poem you understand. I think that you did well with this one :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

xSamilynnx

11 Years Ago

thank you!!!!
Great job! It's dark yet mystical I like it :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful. The tone of the poem is hauntingly breathtaking. Very simple, yet very moving. I like the structure, it keeps the reader going through at a decent clip. The only thing I might even suggest is clarifying the rythme scheme to be constant. Other than that, really good.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great job! you might want to switch up and play with the words though. It'll interest the reader more and vary the context into a deeper and darker tone. Thankyou for writing! ^^


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very strong poem. I wanted to read more. I like the storyline and the feel of darkness and battle to come. Strong description brought the reader into the outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is so beautiful! Dark & awesome. I just love angels! And your expressions are really good, they make the story truly excellent. :D
How come I didn't notice this poem up until now?

Posted 12 Years Ago


Definitely an amazing poem. It's got amazing imagery. There's a few grammar mistakes, but hey... Writing is about freedom... Why limit yourself to the "rules of writing"? Absolutely fantastic detail. I could see it all. You're very talented.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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xSamilynnx

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