Short poem

this is just a random poem i wrote when i was bored... it just kinda came to me

Theres writing in the halls

Its written in bloody red

Its dripping down the walls

And its pointing to the dead

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

Nice!! reminds me of the first time I dropped acid and took almost the whole baggie of some 35 Double-Barrel purples of mescaline!! I couldn't figure out how to leave the school because there was red artwork all over the walls over the lockers, so the walls RAN like blood and paint, and made it very hard to get out. : ) Having a space above and below the poem would certainly make this poem stand out lie it deserves. Powerful words, to include all those last words in each line, specifically! : ) xoxo -Mark

[Hiddenfire]

Nice little piece, it's very haiku like and also quite dark which normally I don't like esp. in smaller pieces but it seemed to work here. reminds me of your fallen angel piece.

[exotic flotsam]

Numerous self derived possiblities. Provocative. Thanks for reading my work. We both seem to like dark writing. Even in Haiku.