Haikus

thumbs and cookies to whoever figures out what exactly I actually did here

Echoing music
Strings vibrate non chalantly
whispering to me

dance to melodies
of unheard autumn songs, give
the life of nature

My melody plays
soft low and sweet to change by
seasons demands, hush

The violin hums
soft sweet tunes echo shadows
dancing through us gently

waiting wilting slow
melodies ring though none hear
sinking slowly, quiet

A melody flows
through time eternal calling
forth the changing tide

Author's Note

this is a 6 year old creative writing assignment so I'm unlikely to adjust it but feel free to tell me what would need adjusting so I can apply it to future works.

Reviews

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Nice work, maybe you should send it NASA so they take it out of this world and send it to Mars for martians to try to interpret it.

Here is the address
http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2013/08/09/haiku-mars_n_3733860.html