Pebbles

If only it was as simple as laying a pebble at your love's feet.

Pebbles

 

Pebbles

I’ll smooth them,

Carve them,

Warm them

And lay them at your

Feet.

 

Will you walk with me

Forever?

Grey. Brown.

White,

Yellow?

I’ll gather them all.

 

And it it’s dark now,

Trust that the brightest

Moments

Have yet to come.

Out of the ashes

The phoenix is born.

 

The day is awakened

From the nightmares

Of the dark.

6 months

With no sun.

But yet I return to

You.

 

I’ll even carry the burdens

Of your life,

And wait,

In hope you’ll return.

From the darkness

Into the light.

 

Because I chose you.

On the beach,

Crouched

Down

I gave you a pebble,

And felt the wind

Signify a change.

 

So we beared the weather

In the land

Without the sun.

And came back to a

Proposal:

Us or them?

 

We promised it would be forever.

You took my pebble

That I’d shaped

Just for you.

But you’ve been

In the dark

For too long.

 

So i’ll never

Give it to another �"

Those pebbles.

Scars.

Scattered...across my body.

I’ll hide the baggage of us.

Underneath my skin.

 

That was never the same as yours.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"We promised it would be forever.

You took my pebble

That I’d shaped

Just for you.

But you’ve been

In the dark

For too long.



So i’ll never

Give it to another "

Those pebbles.

Scars.

Scattered...across my body."
Nice work...:)

[SamanthaSweeney]

Thank you Sami :)
I can trust you see the best in my work

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)

[Aethereal]

Bright multicolored beach pebbles ascend from ashes like a great phoenix chasing the Darkness. I enjoyed the creative structure of this poem that tends to inspired triumphant thoughts.

[SamanthaSweeney]

Thank you :) loved your insight into this.

[Naomi WIlliams]

The visual this gives is wonderful. I love the meaning behind the poem and the fifth stanza was by far my favorite.

[SamanthaSweeney]

Thank you :) I'm glad you understood the meaning and got the picture I was painting.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like the last part about the baggage..i like so much of this...the "beared the weather" tripped me a little...grammatically it should be "bore" but then...taking poetic license i like the double meaning of bear, and bare.
i like the phoenix part...but was waiting to see that revisited..later in the poem..

just some thoughts..but that's just me..

it is a really nice, visual piece.

[SamanthaSweeney]

I think you might be right about that actually Jacob! Just thought it sounded more panicked and rushed thereby showing my mind set at the time.
Love the phoenix idea, I'll keep it in mind whilst re-drafting :)
Thank you again :D

[Miles Wilburn]

Awesome work! The imagery was great :) in a way this poem to me is a descent from innocence. A willingness to give what you can of yourself to another that can't appreciate it. But that's what I gather. Hopefully I haven't butchered what your poem means to you :P terrific piece!

[SamanthaSweeney]

That's really what is was meant to mean if i'm honest :D glad you got it !
You certainly haven't thanks for commenting !
But yeah, giving all you can in the moment for it to then not be enough... for it to escalate to never being enough.