Mistake

One night of untamed emotions

Leads to a lifetime of change

Endless ridicules and ceaseless stares

Innocence lost, childhood forgotten

Wondering about the mess you’ve been caught in

A moments weakness can never be undone

This is a battle that can’t be won

Some friendships prove false, and rumors run rampant

Eventually thoughts become fatalistic

Your life has now become a statistic

Reviews

[Samantha]

This poem actually isn't based on personal experience, I wrote it to try to show my opinion of what it feels like to make a mistake in a particular situation that my friend went through. So, I hope I was able to put real emotion into it even though I haven't lived it. Enjoy :)

[Tony]

Really feeling the intensity of this. The first time should be wonderful but more than often it's a just a statistic. Just my thougts on how the poem moved me. Strong write anyway you interpret it.

[sammyj]

I like this

[Kate Hunter]

the rhyme scheme is very well accomplished. It takes talent to portray your feelings and put them in rhyme at the same time.

[The Warrior Poet]

Good snapshot - I see the emotion this is done well as "How I feel" poem. I do suggest that you rebuild the end as that last line is trite and jaded. I would toss the word statistic back into the crowd and dance with another.

[Sarah Jane]

Jeez Sam, I can totally relate to this. You word things perfectly to give effect. [: