Plagues Of Separation

Passion is burning, but feeling so low. If only you knew, if only you could feel this soul.

If only you suffocated whether awake or a sleep. If only you were cursed with a promise to keep.

Would you fall into depths of dead inside? Would you scream, or would you hide? 

Would you tear yourself from the inside out to never wake again? You'd know why the young poet

hides in his shell until the end. You'd feel the life stripped away by torment,

you'd fester and decay inside your weary mind. You'd know the plague in separation,

and it just might eat you whole...

Reviews

[London's Lily]

Something about this poem strikes a chord with me. It might be the theme of, "if only you knew," as if to say, people look upon you with a distorted view because they don't know what it's like to feel that way, or have the secrets you have.

You'd know why the young poet
hides in his shell until the end. You'd feel the life stripped away by torment,

Those lines made me sad. This is a rather powerful little piece. Well done :)

[Sam Sin Sepultura]

Thank you :) Yeah, this one upsets me everytime I look at it. Let's just say that I was in a rather dark place when I wrote it. Everything I write is a reflection of myself, sometimes it ends up a little more sad than anything. Glad people enjoy something out of it though, it helps the process of letting things go through my work. Thank you for the review and I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[Sirius King]

you'd fester and decay inside your weary mind. You'd know the plague in separation,
and it just might eat you whole...

Very nice
deep write!

[Sam Sin Sepultura]

thank you very much. I was really down and angry when I wrote this if you couldn't tell XD

[Sirius King]

had no idea ;-)


those are the best times to write, you tend to be very honest in those moments.

[Sam Sin Sepultura]

I know what you mean, it's easier to get out feelings when you are down.

[Sirius King]

Exactly, and its better to release it on paper...rather than letting it build up

[Sam Sin Sepultura]

yep, glad you understand :)

[Sirius King]

most def :-)

[Lee]

Whoa. Incredibly intense.
Really liked the rawness in this. At first glance, it doesn't look like this short jumble of words held anything of power, but truly that impression I had was a wrong one. So many things you said I felt were empowering and as I felt the power in the tone behind the words, it resonated. The fourth line was where you truly had me and then the end just made it all complete. Ha, I'm getting all excited over a poem that's "dark". It's well written though and strong. Nice write.

[Sam Sin Sepultura]

thank you so much, it really means a lot. It's always cool to know that someone feels what I write on. You know you're doing something right as a writer when you can make that impact. I'm glad you actually took the time to really think out your review and touch on all the reasons why you liked it. thank you

[Lee]

I'm all about reviews that are constructive and to my best efforts, offer a writer the full perspective of the reader...So I'll try and include initial thoughts/impressions, even down to grammar and sentence structure. I try to be as descriptive as possible especially if I like it... I dont want to just say "i liked it" and then be on my way to the next point. I want you to feel it in my words and Know for certain that that piece is good. I try my best to fully illustrate the feelings the writer's provoke within myself. And I thank you for appreciating the time I took to really gather those words in the review. I enjoyed that piece and I hope to read more from you in the future. :) Best of wishes to you with everything you do.

[Sam Sin Sepultura]

Thank you sir, and I hope you have material for me to read as well.

[Lee]

haha Well when I write something decent I'll let you know. ...Def would appreciate that though. Thanks.

[Sam Sin Sepultura]

no problamo