God is a Murderer

God is a Murderer

A Poem by Sam

I was there at the birth
Of your disease.
God is a murderer.

 

Your comic face is all facade,
Admirable role play,
Stiff upper lip or else,
You'll lose grip.
 

 

If I was God,
I'd set you free
One way or another.
I'll never forgive him for what he's done to you.

© 2008 Sam


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There's something about the last stanza. In the first, you were there at the birth. In the second, you are witness to the coping. There is a sort of progression. We're hearing half the conversation.

And, maybe I don't like God being in that first line of the third stanza. I sort of worked it out in my mind this way:

I'd set you free
if I was God
One way or another.

Those are my thoughts for what they're worth. Powerful writing. I'd love to see your artwork.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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There's something about the last stanza. In the first, you were there at the birth. In the second, you are witness to the coping. There is a sort of progression. We're hearing half the conversation.

And, maybe I don't like God being in that first line of the third stanza. I sort of worked it out in my mind this way:

I'd set you free
if I was God
One way or another.

Those are my thoughts for what they're worth. Powerful writing. I'd love to see your artwork.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

you carry the burden of choosing such a profound title well...

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on May 12, 2008

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Sam
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UK, United Kingdom



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