Faith and it's Falsities

Faith and it's Falsities

A Poem by Gianna Dale
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An extremely lyrical poem about faith. She thought everyone was gone, until she felt even God left her side. Hypocrites come to convert her, offering no help. Enjoy<3

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Leave me be

For I am but a child

A mere ribbon in the curls

An abandon spire

 Alone in its base

No mouth, but a face

That excels to hide

The dungeon room behind

The door you solicit 

Where a devil resides.

You hand me your papers 

Why not come inside?   

You call

You knock

You swear you can save...

Morose lingers

Destiny's slave 

You promote your religion 

But not live its name

 

Let me alone

I be purged of family

Pled from home

May the songs of worship

Match my moans

My harmonic

My life’s eternal tone

As I waste

Like an angel descended

In this grey, despondent cove.

Let the water play

As it laps at my bod

Eroding the trove

Of vitality-"save"-

Me by proceeding on.

All these atrocities

Pray tell,

Where be your God? 

© 2013 Gianna Dale


Author's Note

Gianna Dale
Gimme whatcha got, and be honest. I'm extremely Christian to answer that now, but everybody struggles with their beliefs.

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i make no secret of the fact that i am pagan and i am loathe to embrace any form of organized religion simply because of the judgment and hypocrisy that it exudes. i love this write for its honesty and gritty appeal. in my mind there is nothing so stupid as blind faith in an unproven dogma.....excellent piece.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Gianna Dale

11 Years Ago

I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I'm Christian, as stated earlier, but I'm most definitely not one to lie.. read more
quinfinn

11 Years Ago

you are indeed welcome



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Yes I will not take a stance on religion.. so I read your piece more in the light of spirituality. I think it lends to just about anyone regardless of their viewpoint. Enjoyed your rhymes. ^_^

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i make no secret of the fact that i am pagan and i am loathe to embrace any form of organized religion simply because of the judgment and hypocrisy that it exudes. i love this write for its honesty and gritty appeal. in my mind there is nothing so stupid as blind faith in an unproven dogma.....excellent piece.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Gianna Dale

11 Years Ago

I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I'm Christian, as stated earlier, but I'm most definitely not one to lie.. read more
quinfinn

11 Years Ago

you are indeed welcome
Excellent,
First off I read this line and it stuck with me through the whole piece. It is very eloquent in it's design and message which are so gracefully portrayed. This is my favorite line.

"An abandon spire
Alone in its base
No mouth, but a face
That excels to hide"

I have heard "spire" day and night in poetry, however your accompanying lines gave it such depth and charm in it's dark and monotone conveyance of existence. The whole of this piece is haunting and echoes a disturbing reality of emptiness. I find your meters excellent, though I wonder how much more this piece could have said in a more spoken word fashion. No meters or rhyme scheme. Simple and pure thought put into poetic form. You amaze me ever so often Gianna, truly.
Sincerely
Christopher
100/100

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

unsavable_soul

11 Years Ago

Earned from my perspective is all.
You create such interesting tales within the bodies of your.. read more
Gianna Dale

11 Years Ago

Don't mind a bit(; So kind, thank you again.
unsavable_soul

11 Years Ago

See you soon talented Gianna.
Chris
"My life’s eternal tone
As I waste
Like an angel descended
In this grey, despondent cove."
I like your style a lot for its uniqueness and broad imagery...Well penned and executed...

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Gianna Dale

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much. I know, I have a different way about me and my writing.... Hopefully we will see .. read more
Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

That is what sets you apart . That is good...:)
whoa I'll try to be honest, but I don't know about coming at you bro :p. Lovely stuff I can really feel you in this piece :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Gianna Dale

11 Years Ago

Haha you don't have to (: Thank you!
Luke L

11 Years Ago

you look pretty tough I don't want to start a fight with you :p
Well, Ms Dale, it would seem as though you're a doubter. This is poignant and YAY MEASURE!! Found it!
This is a super-good representation of how people feel when they think about their faiths in depth, whether it be an atheist or a catholic monk. Well done;)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Gianna Dale

11 Years Ago

Thank you(:
Gianna Dale

11 Years Ago

And Ms Linden, I'll have you know that I am very strong in my faith in God. But as you said, we all .. read more
Wow, I like this piece. Wow, it's very lyrical indeed and it flows so wonderfully. I wish I could go into more detail but I promise I will revisit this review soon.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Gianna Dale

11 Years Ago

Thank you(:
WOW, very powerful strong read.
Enjoyed this alot...

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Gianna Dale

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much(:

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