An extremely lyrical poem about faith. She thought everyone was gone, until she felt even God left her side. Hypocrites come to convert her, offering no help. Enjoy<3
i make no secret of the fact that i am pagan and i am loathe to embrace any form of organized religion simply because of the judgment and hypocrisy that it exudes. i love this write for its honesty and gritty appeal. in my mind there is nothing so stupid as blind faith in an unproven dogma.....excellent piece.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I'm Christian, as stated earlier, but I'm most definitely not one to lie.. read moreI'm so glad you enjoyed it. I'm Christian, as stated earlier, but I'm most definitely not one to lie and say that to be religious is to be good. The hypocrisy is a major part of what drove this piece, and how faith is used to manipulate the innocent by the sicker people in this world. It's counterproductive, not to mention painful. I love the infinite ways people are finding to relate to this, and I'm thrilled by it. Just because yours is more extreme doesn't mean I'm not incredibly glad that you could. Thank you for your kind review.
Yes I will not take a stance on religion.. so I read your piece more in the light of spirituality. I think it lends to just about anyone regardless of their viewpoint. Enjoyed your rhymes. ^_^
i make no secret of the fact that i am pagan and i am loathe to embrace any form of organized religion simply because of the judgment and hypocrisy that it exudes. i love this write for its honesty and gritty appeal. in my mind there is nothing so stupid as blind faith in an unproven dogma.....excellent piece.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I'm Christian, as stated earlier, but I'm most definitely not one to lie.. read moreI'm so glad you enjoyed it. I'm Christian, as stated earlier, but I'm most definitely not one to lie and say that to be religious is to be good. The hypocrisy is a major part of what drove this piece, and how faith is used to manipulate the innocent by the sicker people in this world. It's counterproductive, not to mention painful. I love the infinite ways people are finding to relate to this, and I'm thrilled by it. Just because yours is more extreme doesn't mean I'm not incredibly glad that you could. Thank you for your kind review.
Excellent,
First off I read this line and it stuck with me through the whole piece. It is very eloquent in it's design and message which are so gracefully portrayed. This is my favorite line.
"An abandon spire
Alone in its base
No mouth, but a face
That excels to hide"
I have heard "spire" day and night in poetry, however your accompanying lines gave it such depth and charm in it's dark and monotone conveyance of existence. The whole of this piece is haunting and echoes a disturbing reality of emptiness. I find your meters excellent, though I wonder how much more this piece could have said in a more spoken word fashion. No meters or rhyme scheme. Simple and pure thought put into poetic form. You amaze me ever so often Gianna, truly.
Sincerely
Christopher
100/100
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Holy Roman Empire, what an excellent review. Wow, thank you so much Christopher. I'm so glad you cou.. read moreHoly Roman Empire, what an excellent review. Wow, thank you so much Christopher. I'm so glad you could connect. Thank you for the perfect score, my heart jumps miles at it.
Always,
Gianna
Earned from my perspective is all.
You create such interesting tales within the bodies of your.. read moreEarned from my perspective is all.
You create such interesting tales within the bodies of your work. Such interesting material. I will be reading more soon if you don't mind?
Chris
"My life’s eternal tone
As I waste
Like an angel descended
In this grey, despondent cove."
I like your style a lot for its uniqueness and broad imagery...Well penned and executed...
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11 Years Ago
Thank you so much. I know, I have a different way about me and my writing.... Hopefully we will see .. read moreThank you so much. I know, I have a different way about me and my writing.... Hopefully we will see if that way is generally appreciated some day soon.
Well, Ms Dale, it would seem as though you're a doubter. This is poignant and YAY MEASURE!! Found it!
This is a super-good representation of how people feel when they think about their faiths in depth, whether it be an atheist or a catholic monk. Well done;)
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11 Years Ago
Thank you(:
11 Years Ago
And Ms Linden, I'll have you know that I am very strong in my faith in God. But as you said, we all .. read moreAnd Ms Linden, I'll have you know that I am very strong in my faith in God. But as you said, we all have struggle when we consider our faith depth sometimes. I am no doubter. I'm human (: So there's no 'score one for the atheist' here (;
Wow, I like this piece. Wow, it's very lyrical indeed and it flows so wonderfully. I wish I could go into more detail but I promise I will revisit this review soon.
Narcoleptic life, dreams, hallucinations- madness. But hey, it makes for some good insomnia-driven inspiration. And besides, all of the best writers in history were crazy or on LSD, were they not? (Th.. more..