Relate to Me

An extended metaphor. If we expressed more openly, we might understand each other a little more.

I remember things much differently than they seem to.

Perception equates to pain, once you do the math.

But we all seem to forget to identify our variables. 

Personally, of course, we live in a way that's defined by them.

But if our professors taught us the truth 

If there were brave confessors that stepped out from specific consensus 

We'd find our variables are very similar, 

and that we could solve these problems much easier assisted by a peer

We remember things much like the people around us do. 

The human condition 

Is self isolation.

 

Author's Note

It makes sense to me. But I'm generally a very closed person outside of my writing. Tell me what you think, be honest. This is the first poem I've published so far that doesn't have a rhyming scheme to it and I want your opinion. Much love <3 -Gianna

Reviews

[KAin]

The last two lines really resonate for me:

"The human condition
Is self isolation."

I think, deep down, everyone is searching for those places where we can be honest about ourselves, with others. But the world has taught us to be cynical and suspicious, and we wall ourselves off completely.
As T.S. Eliot wrote

"There will be time, there will be time
To prepare a face to meet the faces that you meet; "

That's a picture of an endless parade of masks, and behind those masks there are people suffering, alone.

I agree completely, and reading your Author's Note I feel the same. Most of the writers I know are rather closed-off people - the writing we do might be the best insights anyone has into our personalities. But even that might be veiled by contrivances...
Anyway, back to your poem -
I think the lack of a rhyme scheme is something that can make for more honest poetry as you aren't enslaved by the need for things to rhyme- some of the best poems (in my opinion) are those that don't rhyme at all. ("Ulysses" by Alfred Lord Tennyson, or "Darkness", by Lord Byron).

I really enjoyed this - a great thought-provoking piece.

[Gianna Dale]

Extremely helpful review, thank you so much for taking the time and understanding it so deeply. That's an excellent quote to match this piece. I will take from this review especially the confidence to continue trying my hand at more natural poetry. Thank you so much!!

[Créatif Word]

“....they’re a whole lot of people trying so hard to be one person.”
F. Scott Fitzgerald

Eloquent piece Gianna. I guess at the end of the day we are all cogs in a complex machine; "Perception equates to pain..." in our own unique free will we have forgotten that we are a part of this system. We are constantly trying to pull apart from the very fabric of our existence. And yes "We'd find our variables are very similar" and we do need other people to solve this complex enigma.

As F. Scott Fitzgerald says, we are trying so hard to be one person, but the reality of things is that;
"The human condition
Is self isolation"
We live from the inside out....

[Gianna Dale]

Very well said. Interesting thoughts, thank you for sharing them(:

[Maria Linden]

I love the 'we all seem to forget to indentify our variables'. Eloquent, and accurate:) well done and I like the flow. It's determined.

[Gianna Dale]

Why thank you(: You understand the flow perfectly.

[quinfinn]

as prose goes , this is much more than an effort, it is a triumph. awesome subject and truly written after and with much thought and nicely penned. you may color this poet impressed.

[Gianna Dale]

And you in return may color this poet extremely flattered (: Thank you so much, what an uplifting review.

[quinfinn]

you are welcome!

[Sami Khalil]

A really good one...:)

[Gianna Dale]

Thanks(:

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Gianna,

Equatingly insightful like staring at a picture and trying to decide its true inner meaning then realizing its a picture of you. Well written.

Always,

Matthew
A.

[Gianna Dale]

Hey there Matthew,
Thank you so much for understanding my poem in such a way. Extremely well stated.
Many thanks(: -Gianna