Searching

I've basically rewritten it so even if you have read it before if you could read it again it would be very appreciated. =)

 

These things went beyond her mind's capabilities

Painful thoughts posessing her conscious mind, a demon sent into her head

Some would tell her it was the trials and temptations of the great devil

She was briefly ployed by this life-preserving fantasy

She drowned wherever she went

She stumbled in whatever she did

She waited for the life-giving- breath-taking numbness that never came

Her personality changed

Her smile was faked

Her posture sloped to a  neanderthal's

Her eyes swollen and downcast

A few steps were miles, a few words a novel

Nothing is harder than getting out of bed

She doesn't want to wake up for the fear that this day she will end her wandering 

She walked out into the trees, into a meadow with a stream running through it

The bright ball of fire smiled warmly down at her shivering frame

She stopped with her head in its familiar hang

Waiting

Contemplating 

Her head slowly rises from its cradle of death and

As she scans the shadows it finally becomes clear

Reviews

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A well written poem. Enjoyed reading it very much. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[ccamuseme]

How does one truly review ones prose? One is many different than any other. So the one that one reads can mean something different to so many who offer reviews, critiques or thoughts? Now thoughts are valid in lieu of perception of what you have in terms of the meanings, brought by way of feelings felt during the deployment of thoughts, streaming subconsciously through you, the one whom felt compelled to share such a great display of the self, non, or fictionally based. One, that of myself would have to take each lines meaning to the next to the whole.

The depth of what you've written deserves depth in "review".

But to give it to you plainly, very thought provoking literally.

Great art!

[V. Lucien Maier]

good flow, good vocabulary use.

[An owl on the moon]

Such a depth of longing... of moving darkness... a life searching for life... This is so amazing to read again and again...

[justjenn_2u]

A poem that has a universal closure to it. Makes the reader ponder. I enjoyed this poem and look forward to reading more of your work.