Numb

About the Nazi Holocaust

Watching people suffer

Knowing that I am next

The children are the worst

I feel their pain more than my own

 

The Nazis have no hearts

They do not hear the children

Calling for water and their mommies

They are braver than all of us

 

All around me I see death

I step on the dead

It started on the trains

Before I ever knew

 

Our pain causes joy

We are nothing but a bag of bones

A source of amusement

A source of labor

 

How they sleep

I do not know

Suicide crosses our minds

Most of the time the will to survive wins

 

Day by day

Hour by hour

Minute by minute

Second by second

 

Pain and suffering

Fear and death

Hunger and cold

At last, I go numb

Reviews

[Argentina]

True indeed, this is a very touching piece for those who have insight into the mass slaughter of European civilians and especially Jews by the Nazis during World War II. The pain of watching the children suffer was most unbearable, just thinking about it makes me numb.

Excellent write.

Argentina

[Kenji Light]

The imagery in this is fantastic considering that you are a new writer. I suggest going and reading other people's works so that you can see how other poets have developed their style of imagery. I think that I could help if you wanted to look at some of my works and see how I weave images into my pieces. I have also read Night. It is an amazing testament of the human will to survive. He did, and mananged to move to America to become a best-selling author. I did not notice any grave syntax errors in the piece this time, which is good because it was more carefully typed and proofread. I loved your ending line. Your powerful words at the end really go well considering the subject and the book itself. Many of the Jews in the Nazi work camps not only went physically numb, but mentally. As you and Wiesel wrote, people stepped on bodies, trampling both corpses and the living people who just no longer had the strength to stand. People fought over food and water and would horde anything that they could to keep themselves alive. People lost their sense of community and only a very rare few kept the sanity to even live with others. You wrote about some very ugly things, and for a new writer you wrote about them very well.

[Ashli Nicole]

Hmm. I like it. I think you did really good. It really makes me feel like I'm there, seeing what the persona saw and such. Its deep. Keep up the good work.

- A. N. Denham

[Ashli Nicole]

Hmm. I like it. I think you did really good. It really makes me feel like I'm there, seeing what the persona saw and such. Its deep. Keep up the good work.

- A. N. Denham