Social Circus

Social Circus

A Poem by Maan
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The world we are living in, has become a circus.

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The life you’re living
The life I’m living
Is no more than a stone
attached with a strong thread
swirling by an unknown someone
Your life is a show
My life is a showcase
Like a puppet or some magician show
Playing there acts in their stalls
So dependant,
with skillful subordinates
of no skillful masters
But all of them get so admiration
Like they are gods of some sort 
Some of us are like the caged animals
Relying completely on our untrained masters
Some of us are the birds
the victims of the magic show
We have no trainer
Nor some inspiration
The pretenders we got
The pretenders we are
We’re living worst than the animals
They are what they are
We are what we learn to show
We’re just like the clowns
Trying to spread smiles
But all we are doing is scaring kids
We have become a part
A part of never ending circus
With no hope of alteration the scene
With no intentions to breathe
Because we have become a part
A part of the social circus

© 2012 Maan


Author's Note

Maan
I don't see much of the world, but as much as I've seen it or as much I have experienced it, Its so fake, every single person is a poser, trying to be a better one. Let me know abut my poem. .

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Your poem presents some interesting observations. While it's true that some people try to be very controlling, others allow themselves to be controlled. And living among others in a society means that we are constantly bumping into and interacting with others. The only way to avoid that is to live the life of a hermit. While you poem is well done it would be better if you changed a few word choices that the computer would not catch. The line, "But all of them get so admiration" doesn't make sense to me. And there are other places like that. You'll catch them when you do a careful proofread, making your good poem even better.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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The grammar is a little rough; I think English may not be your first language? It is an intriguing idea, though, the thought that we are puppets without skillful masters. Polish up the grammar, if you can, and this will really be a great poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is actually like, my brain. You obviously read my mind and wrote this. Well done, i really enjoyed reading this. :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


I like the idea of this. It's really good, and I enjoyed reading it. The imagery and structure is great.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Your poem presents some interesting observations. While it's true that some people try to be very controlling, others allow themselves to be controlled. And living among others in a society means that we are constantly bumping into and interacting with others. The only way to avoid that is to live the life of a hermit. While you poem is well done it would be better if you changed a few word choices that the computer would not catch. The line, "But all of them get so admiration" doesn't make sense to me. And there are other places like that. You'll catch them when you do a careful proofread, making your good poem even better.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Kes
This is amazing. Life's a beautiful lie.
Keep up the great work!
K

Posted 12 Years Ago


Yup life is a circus and we the clowns. Flowing sad write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This expresses your intent very well. It seems no one is allowed to be "real" by society. You have to watch your back at all times. To show your vulnerabilities is to invite scorn and backstabbing. Who can be totally real, with no masks, under such conditions?

Posted 12 Years Ago


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This is a very deep piece. I love the simile you use with the clown reference, and that we are scaring the kids(very clever). Good work :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Love the poem :)
Makes me happy my friends aren't as the poem describes people. There a lot of possers and a lot of people aren't. :) Just gotta look hard enough, and you'll see the world is full of people that are different.
:D KEEP WRITING!

Posted 12 Years Ago


This poem speaks the harsh truth. Well done on expressing your feelings about the socially constructed world we all live in. Not many people are able to see it that way..but I'm glad to know that at least some see the world from a perspective that isn't so obvious. Thanks for sharing and thanks for reviewing my work!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Maan
Maan

Karachi, Sindh, Pakistan



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