I don't know why I wrote this one. Literally I don't know. I'm not a big fan of God, neither of religions. I sometimes call myself hypocrite, uh I guess that's what I am. Anyways the poem, do let me know what you feel and think about it. Feel free to share your views. .
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This is my first read of your writes..And I am glad I chose this write ( looking at the title, of course).. I loved the content of this write..
All your questions are authentic..
I find many precious gems sprawled in your write..
In the fourth stanza, evil being practiced, region turning into religions.. In the fifth, the scene of terror a perfect error... And in the first, your people and your world perfectly perfect but imperfect... And of course, all those questions...very beautiful indeed!
Faith factor is what really works.... As many regions as many religions and languages as many names...
Thought and contemplation will give clarity and enlighten us on this particular topic..
But reading this is a pure pleasure for me.. The content of this write has really touched me..I see a great writer in you..
You will learn the nuances of grammar and other things as you read others' works and there are some very kind writers who guide us and give their honest opinions.. That helps us a lot..
I shall be reading all your writes soon..
I recommend reading Alexander Pope's 'Essay on Man' as a poetic followup to this.
In God's, one single can its end produce;
Yet serves to second too some other use.
So Man, who here seems principal alone,
Perhaps acts second to some sphere unknown,
Touches some wheel, or verges to some goal;
'Tis but a part we see, and not a whole.
When the proud steed shall know why Man restrains
His fiery course, or drives him o'er the plains;
When the dull Ox, why now he breaks the clod,
Is now a victim, and now Egypt's God
Then shall Man's pride and dullness comprehend
His actions', passions', being's, use and end;
Why doing, suff'ring, check'd, impell'd; and why
This hour a slave, the next a deity.
Then say not Man's imperfect, Heav'n in fault;
Say rather, Man's as perfect as he ought;
His knowledge measur'd to his state and place,
His time a moment, and a point his space.
Kneel, drop your eyes,
Lift the weight , let your heart be a feather,
Find a spot ,today, everyday
Where you Kneel, release the weight and....
Let your heart be a feather.
Well, first I would say that if you actually believe in God I assure you the He is a big fan of yours. Religions do not reflect the character of God. You made this point in your poem. The beauty, and hope and freedom to cry out in anger and pain reflect Him better.
Need to use the rich are getting richer, poor are getting poorer etc...
Nice exploration and a good direction for your young mind to consider.
I'm an atheist - mainly because of the reasons you've stated to be honest. Since I was very little, I've refused to believe that there's someone or something out there who's supposed to be perfect, but sees the evil, and the pain, and sadness in human beings and lets it all just carry on. I was a pretty intense kid. :P
This is a great poem.
K
Posted 12 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
maybe that's part of his plan. to see how good we can be without him. if you know what I mean. Sorry.. read moremaybe that's part of his plan. to see how good we can be without him. if you know what I mean. Sorry, I just saw this review, and it occurred to me!
12 Years Ago
Don't apologise! It's a good point.
But why does he/she/it have a plan? Why do we need to be t.. read moreDon't apologise! It's a good point.
But why does he/she/it have a plan? Why do we need to be tested?
I'm just thinking aloud. :)
K
12 Years Ago
maybe because it proves our worth?
12 Years Ago
Why do we need to prove our worth? lol Sorry, I'm not trying to be irritating; I'm just playing Devi.. read moreWhy do we need to prove our worth? lol Sorry, I'm not trying to be irritating; I'm just playing Devil's advocate.
K
12 Years Ago
i understand. maybe we need to prove our worth because, it shows our love for him, or devotion or so.. read morei understand. maybe we need to prove our worth because, it shows our love for him, or devotion or something.
that makes sense. Or even better, Maybe in heaven we didn't have bodies, so he sent us down here to .. read morethat makes sense. Or even better, Maybe in heaven we didn't have bodies, so he sent us down here to get them, and then to prove that we deserve them.
Not really much to say about what I am or anything about me. Its like I've never find myself in the spheres of something and something not, I always wander somewhere in between them, all I get is the .. more..