The Boy With The Teddy

Because my echo is the only voice coming back; shadow - the only friend that I have.

THE BOY WITH THE TEDDY

 

A boy stands on the deserted road, his friend - Teddy - by his side.

Wonders he: “What have I done, to be the one, to get left behind?”

No answers appear, for nobody remains with loving arms open wide.

No answers appear, for there are none to give - atleast, none that sound genial.

 

The streetlight flickers - a lonely guardian of the night; the boy’s confusion grows.

Wonders he: “Why am I the only one who needs to lead his life, alone?”

No answers appear, for nobody remains except he on the empty road.

No answers appear, for there are none to give - atleast, none he hasn’t already been told.

 

The wind picks up speed - a lonely, piercing whisper; the boy’s eyes widen with fear.

Wonders he: “What if I have lost each and everyone I have ever held dear?”

No answers appear, for nobody remains to hear his silent tears.

No answers appear, for there are none to give - atleast, none he would want to hear.

 

The monstrous trees shake their heads; the boy heaves a heavy sigh.

Wonders he: “Will anyone ever look beyond themselves, and see me standing by?”

No answers appear, for nobody remains to tell him it will be alright.

No answers appear, for there are none to give - atleast, none followed by a smile.

 

The distant screech of worn tires on road: The boy looks up with hope.

Wonders he: “Can this be the one last way left to take me back home?”

No answers appear, for nobody stops for the boy standing on the road.

No answers appear, for there are none to give - atleast, none he would want to know.

 

The long road still stretches ahead; the boy shivers and pulls his teddy close.

Wonders he: “Will anyone ever stop for me, and offer to take me home?”

But the answer was given, and the boy knew that: With his teddy, he walked down the road.

Perhaps, he’ll reach his home by morning … But there’s still a long, long way to go.

 

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Author's Note

Was watching Artificial Intelligence (Hail Spielberg!). Suggestions would be most welcome.

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

You are a very talented writer indeed.
All your writing have really awesome story lines that leave the readers wanting more.
This story was great, meaning behind it, the few rhymes, the emotion everything was great.
All comes together really well.
Keep writing :)

[Sally Hope]

Aw, thank you so much!!! I'm so glad you liked it. Thanks, again, for your heartfelt review, Cimmy :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Your welcome no worries. I really love your poetry :)

[Robert Parlange]

Very good write. We all travel down a dark, lonely road sometimes. No one gets through life undamaged. But that road usually leads to somewhere. And if it's not where we want to be, we can always keep going.

Hell, am I getting philosophical again? Sorry about that, grasshopper.

[Sally Hope]

Your review is like a guidebook to the poem, which I'm actually really grateful for. And no, you're not getting philosophical, because if YOU are philosophical, then I'll have to be the weeping philosopher. And the weeping philosopher is old ... and wrinkly ... and kind of crippled. So, no, we both are simply extremely like-minded geniuses. Thanks for reading this, though. It means a lot.

[Johnny]

Very good Sally! It remains a mystery as to when or if he ever got home... something I can sort of relate to but in a different context... I would love to read if perhaps there is a sequel? perhaps he gets home and finds his home empty and deserted? or on a more cheerful note his family is all there waiting for him? sort of like the door was locked and he climbed in through the top window and went downstairs with his teddy and the boy turned out to be sleep-walking.. therefore it was all just a dream until he got out of bed?

(just tossing you ideas) :P

[Sally Hope]

You know, you already HAVE composed a whole free-verse poem right in the review :) Thanks for the ideas, though. Maybe, I will write a sequel one day. Thanks for reading this, and I'm glad you liked it.

[Tomoe Tellez]

Even though the story is sad... the poem is amazing! I mean the way you structure each verse with the same first words and still made it sound different is just great, it made me think of how much I love Dr. Seuss books. Great job!

[Sally Hope]

Thank you so much for that amazing review, Alondra! I'm glad you liked it. And, yes, a fan of Dr. Seuss books, too :)

[Insight "MH"]

Firstly, what a beautiful picture you have here. Secondly, I wish if you included the stick which he holds. All in all, the poem is a great story with a unique style, especially with this repeated phrase: "No answers appear, for nobody........" which gives the reader a concrete idea of how lonely the boy really is. Well done!

Insight.

[Sally Hope]

Thank you so much for that wonderful review, Insight. Now that you pointed it out, I too wish I had included the stick - it would've been a great idea. I still have to increase my observational skills, you see :) I'm glad you liked it.

[Insight "MH"]

You are welcome. Stick or not, the poem was a great read for me.

[Valentine]

This made me think of all of the throw away children across this world. Valentine

[Sally Hope]

Thank you so much for reading this, Valentine. At its heart, this poem is dedicated to all such innocent, unfortunate children. At times, we forget how lucky we all are.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I've got no suggestions to help you further improve this excellent piece of poetry.
"Why?"
but answers will not be,
at least not today,
because I'm off with my lover.
you're welcome :)

100 points.
(there's a 't' missing in the “Why am I the only one who needs to lead his life, alone?”

anyway, i loved the write.

[Sally Hope]

Enjoy yourself, Danny! And tell your lover that if he doesn't return you in time for our "brainchild" (remember the code, right? Or, I'll just look like an idiot typing it down), machines and tin cans are going to stalk him for the rest of his life. Good day! (Or night, wherever you are). *Amen*

[Dani The Unreviewed]

what code? *giggling in background* and let em try... ahahahaha! >;D

[Dani The Unreviewed]

he just returned me btw. hehe.

[Sally Hope]

Returnefd to earth? Good. Great, actually. And this the first time I heard/read a boy "giggle"; they usually chuckle, you know *Chuckling* _/|_

[Sally Hope]

That will be "returned" and not whatever sh*t I wrote. Just sayin'.

[Sally Hope]

Oh, and I had nothing to do, so I wandered round the site a bit, and guess what? I found this: "To Danny"
Does the title sound similar????

[Dani The Unreviewed]

yea i read it. my lover's poem, he wrote for my bday.

[Sally Hope]

That's so sweet of him. To be the inspiration behind someone's art ... that must feel precious. You're lucky, Danny.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Yes, i am. :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

so..what you think bout it?

[alifeacoustic]

Beautifully capturing the echoes and fears of a mind trying to make sense of th. e senseless that we live amongst. A lonely road, confusion and a fear of what surrounds him, and what doesnt. Lost in the wind, watching, rather than participating, with no one to stop and notice, or care.
Makes me want to watch the movie again.

[Sally Hope]

Thank you so, so much! I simply needed to write this poem down, before it got "lost in the wind". Watching A.I. always makes me so sad, that it becomes impossible for me to function articulately for a few hours (Spielberg's Magic). Anyway, loved that you loved it, and immensely happy that I could make you want to watch the movie, again.

[alifeacoustic]

Loved that you loved that I loved it. :)

[Sally Hope]

Huh. Well, loved that you loved that I loved that you loved it. (This could go on all night, you know that, right? Just sayin').

[alifeacoustic]

Well, apart from the storm knocking me offline every ten minutes, it would. And if I kept going any longer it would just give you a headache trying to figure out if I got the I's and You's right and by the end of it both our heads would explode, and I don't want that. Not on a Saturday :)