A Winter of Memories

You only miss the sun when it starts to snow ...

 

 

 

 

 A WINTER OF MEMORIES

 

 

The roses are dead. Crystal snowflakes

Adorn the abandoned home we lived in.

I stop by sometimes, to gather the pieces of my life,

And contemplate if I could've made it alright.

 

 

MAY:

 

When we first met, our hearts did not race.

Yet our eyes did get drawn to each other's face.

The summer wind blew; all around arose anew:

The only broken dolls were me and you.

 

JUNE:

 

You - oh, why? - were the only thing in my mind.

The raindrops fell, but I flew high.

Touches were soft, kisses were grace.

The distance was closed - our hearts raced.

 

JULY:

 

The world welcomed us, and we welcomed the world.

The nights were a harmony, the days were a blur.

When the glorious lights lit up the night sky,

I saw my tinted images reflected in your eyes.

 

AUGUST:

 

The late summer wind blew in the dust and leaves.

We pretended we were still in bliss.

Holding hands; nonconformist stands;

We were treading on unmapped lands.

 

SEPTEMBER:

The first time I cried; the first time you lied;

The first time I let the roses die.

The autumn onset turned the green leaves red,

And I uttered the words that I'll always regret.

 

OCTOBER:

 

Autumn brought tears, and incarnation of our fears,

As the unwanted, unasked for, inevitable neared.

I saw the leaves fall, I heard the last call,

I gathered the letters and the broken dolls.

 

NOVEMBER:

 

When we last met, our gazes never scraped.

We neither felt love, nor any hate.

The November nights were the loneliest time,

But the tears didn't fall - my eyes were dry.

 

DECEMBER:

 

The roses are dead. Crystal snowflakes

Adorn the abandoned home we lived in.

I stop by sometimes, to gather the pieces of my life,

And contemplate if I could've made it alright.

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Author's Note

My first attempt at a love poetry (though it turned out to be sad in the end because, you know, I'm terrible with happy endings!). Hope you like it. Suggestions would be most welcome.

Reviews

[Bear]

The reality is there are less happy endings than sad and I would rather read a sad believable ending than a far fetched happy one. I liked the monthly format and the emotion was real and engaging. There are on guarantees of happiness in life, it is what you make of it and are willing to invest into it so I find your poems ending perfect :~)

[Sally Hope]

Thank you so much for taking the time to read this. Your words are true: There's no happiness in life unless you make it. I'm glad that you liked the ending. Some stories are destined to end this way.

[Bear]

I tell people that I like dark poetry, how can you know happiness or love without knowing and understanding sad or loneliness? And learning how others react and deal with it is a great lesson learned without the hard knocks :~)

[Kelly Scheppers]

There's something about repeating a verse that gives a poem a profound meaning to me. It's like coming full circle...and I know I've done it often.

The pendulum sway of each month gave its hue in great detail...there was nothing to do but fall in love with its delivery!

[Sally Hope]

I love to repeat verses, too (though, they don't work in all the pieces). But, as soon as I wrote the first stanza, I knew that would have to be how the poem ended, as well. And after that, came the idea of timing their relationship ... Thank you so much for taking the time to read this. It truly means a lot.

[hanir]

Marvelously written! 😍😍😍

[Sally Hope]

Thanks for taking the time to read this, Hanir :)

[hanir]

You're welcome. You're such a talented writer!

[Strawberry Evil]

LOVE. IT. !!! *claps* I love the structure, how it goes from side to side. Also, the different colors give it a fun, playful outlook. Other thing I like is how you repeated the first lines at the end. It works really well here. Also the fact that each part is a month... Well.. Yeah, there's nothing I don't like in this poem! Really good job, keep it going!

[Sally Hope]

Thanks for taking the time to read this :) I'm really glad that you liked it.

[Autumn Lyric]

loved the how you assigned each month with memories that seemed to be threaded with a bittersweet happiness and regret; progressing with a measure of time and seasonal rhyme... the opening and closing lines give the work great emphasis and lead to being an unforgettable piece of writing. there are subtle notes of healing within these poetic verses, nicely done... also, the perfectly placed hues of color for each month was a feast to the eyes and they made the impact of each occurrence that much more intensified...

[Sally Hope]

Thank you so much for the wonderful review. I'm so glad that you liked the color coordination and font arrangement; it was a bit of an experiment, to be honest. Again, thanks for taking the time to read this :)

[Simon Welsh]

I like how it's structured. I hate that feeling when the roses die and the dreams are futile. Nicely written.

[Sally Hope]

Thank you so much. Nobody likes to see the roses die and dreams turn futile, but in the end, they always do, because people are people, and they change their minds. Glad that you liked it.

[BlaqkShadow]

Amazing, I love the way the stages of love match up with the seasons and weather in the months. My favourite line is :"The summer wind blew; all around arose anew:
The only broken dolls were me and you." - the imagery is so powerful and beautiful, I just love it.
It really represents when the bloom of love fades so does the colour and the life around you. Very emotional and poetic. Keep it up :D x

[Sally Hope]

Thanks, BlaqkShadow! I decided seasons and weather would be a good comparison to love and feelings. After all, they're both quite fickle :) Glad that you liked it.

[Calamityofgin]

Love the progression..stasis story catharthis denouement return to stasis with the repeat of the beautiful first verse.

Gorgeous with the colors picked with some pupose and meaning for the months...really striking word use.

A moving gal meets guy love story...

Love and wishes for a calender full of racing heart....

Calamity of jen

[Sally Hope]

Thank you so much, Jen :) It truly means a lot that you liked it.

[alifeacoustic]

A wonderful and poignant dance through the seasons of life and love. I think the beginning and end repeating works really well for this piece and I love the line "The only broken dolls were me and you".
So much of life and love summed up perfectly in such a short space of time, just like life can be. We never see the changes coming until they are upon us.

[Sally Hope]

Your review summed up perfectly every thought that went through my head while writing this piece. We tend to stay blind to all the changes around us, hoping they'll evaporate if we ignore them. Thank you so much for such a lovely review :)

[alifeacoustic]

You're very welcome.

[Insight "MH"]

The arrangement is beautiful and this piece made me like your writings more.

Insight.

[Sally Hope]

Thank you so much for your lovely words, Insight :)

[Johnny]

Very well written piece! it was better than my first attempts at romance/tragedy
I like how you used different colors and a timeline.. nice touch!

[Sally Hope]

Thank you :) I thought I'd use different colors for separate stanzas for portraying how feelings can go from hot to cold within a year.