Reflections

All we are, and all we shall be, have nothing to do with what all we were.

REFLECTIONS

Have you looked in the mirror, and seen

The ghost that you have hidden underneath?

Have you looked in the mirror, and asked why

The teardrops always outnumber the smiles?

 

Have you looked into your eyes, and thought:

Why have they gathered sleep and rot?

Have you tried to create a feeble smile on you  face,

But ended up counting your ribs, instead?

 

Have you seen your reflection under a clear blue sky,

And wondered: Is it the reflection that is obscured, or, am I?

Have you counted the steps to your home,

And found you are a bit further away than you were a moment ago?

Have you lost everything that once mattered in your life,

And found that - yet - you are breathing, and alive?

Have you believed in something so much,

That you forgot the difference between trust and love?

 

Have you broken your heart, and found

It glues back together once the millionth sun goes down?

Have you ever shut your eyes, and imagined:

If I don’t see the world, then neither can the world see me?

 

If so, then just know:

You are one of many who will learn from their mistakes.

If not, then just know:

You are the only one who has not started living, yet.

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Author's Note

Suggestions would be most welcome.

Reviews

[Calamityofgin]

Honey once again i adore your piece.
Suggeztion...there are a couple lines that lose the rhyme..
I use intermittent rhyme a lot..but its scattered and only when there is no other pattern. There is a pattern here..i would stick to it..

But thsts no biggie...did not keep me from loving this clever piece of philosophic poetry! Well done!

And i love the end that has a hopeful and empowering end⭐💗
Good for you mih darlin Mistress Hope.

Love and wishes of empowerment...

Calamity of Jennifer

[Sally Hope]

Thank you so much, Jennifer! It always feels good to know how I can improve my writing, even if it's not a biggie; details should be paid attention to. I'll try to keep to the rhyme the next time I write a patterned piece like this. Thank you so much for your helpful review :)

[Rosaliine]

I love this! It's very thought provoking. Thank you for sharing it ! x

[Sally Hope]

Thank you so much for taking the time to read this, Rosaliine! It means a lot.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Well... i disagree with the description. what we were has a lot to do with what we are and will be.

whatever one was, will be part of em. no one can rip out pieces of themselves.



as for the write, i loved it.

[Sally Hope]

I was a kind soul, once upon a time, Danny. Now I'm as evil as Loki of The Avengers, as angry as the Hulk, half of the time. So, no, nothing we were can predict what we'll become, although hearing you say that gives me hope for my redemption *HopefulSigh*

[Dani The Unreviewed]

idc. that's only my honest opinion. you're welcome.

[Sally Hope]

Bleh. And I just discovered that I'm so outdated that I had to actually look up the full form of "idc" on Google. Talk of a slow brain and pretentiousness. Somewhat like killing machines bare-handed and alone ... You're welcome.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

lol. i meant i don't care...if you're mad at me for disagreeing... lol

[Sally Hope]

You "lol" too many times ... Take a break ... Have a glass of water ... Your voice must be hoarse, by now. And no, I'm not angry (I'm in Bruce Banner Mode, now, you see).

[Dani The Unreviewed]

hahaha lol lol

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I'm in a good mood for a change ... not taking a break. lol

[Sally Hope]

You have quite an extensive vocabulary, Danny. I'm impressed. Did you know a red line appears beneath the word "lol"? Do you know what that good ol' line means? It means "lol" is not a word, at all. So stop "lol"ing. *LOL*

[Dani The Unreviewed]

idc. lmao.

[Sally Hope]

Well, idc, either, if you're "lmao"ing or "rofl"ing or simply "lol"ing. You seriously need a breather, dude. I'm starting to worry for your lungs (laughter is NOT always good for health).

[Dani The Unreviewed]

lol no worries, my lungs are made of titanium...lol

[Sally Hope]

Hail the new Wolverine! (Although, he had astatine flowing in him, not titanium, but still). Now you stand a 49/51 chance of winning against the machines.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

lol. metal brain, steel heart, titanium lungs, advanced weaponry, metal music for my ears. Hehehe bring it machinery. I'll stomp em in the ground. hehehe. eat em 'n smile. :D

[Dani The Unreviewed]

i shoot to thrill, 'n I'm ready to kill!

around town for rock 'n roll,
sometimes got beat, so I've had enough. time for the mask to go off. Hellraiser!

[Sally Hope]

Please don't smile after chewing machines and metal (Then, you'll actually look like your profile pic). And, as for your metallic physique ... Welcome to Earth, Stormtrooper. *CueStarWarsTheme*

[Sally Hope]

Going to read "Bit of Reality". Cross your fingers, buddy, CROSS YOUR fingers ...

[Dani The Unreviewed]

lol lol. i know, it's creepy... >:D
Loading....

parsing graphics ...
preparing map...
loading bots ....


"Lock 'n load!"


geared up...
"Alright, lets move out!"

[Dani The Unreviewed]

ok... fingers crossed.

[Sally Hope]

You can uncross them, now.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

lol lol. ok im back to machine hunting mode.lol

[Sally Hope]

Beep.
Beep.
Beep.
Beep.
#MachineHuntingModeEnabled.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Checking health status....
Sensors activated.
Health maximum level.
Ammunition maximum level.
Armaments... Primary weapons checked.
Secondary weapons checked.

All systems are ready.

"lock 'n load."


*hut hut hut...! running towards unaware machines.*

★target locked.★

"hehehe. say nighty night tin cans." >:)

[Sally Hope]

Wow. We've unconsciously/subconsciously started writing a screenplay. And it's COOL!

Tin Can #1 (In Machine Tongue): Do you hear that sound?
Tin Can #2 (while sucking the marrow from a human femur): Eh...?
You (Soliloquy): They are unaware...! Yessssss.....

[Dani The Unreviewed]

cool.!!! i love it. hey...maybe we should do a collaboration.

[Sally Hope]

Sure. Just promise not to include any "lol"s in that.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Deal! Okey, now if you got any spectacular ideas to start it off, then it would be the right moment, for sharing them. I've got one, but it would take long to develop it, to the point where the heroes are fighting day after day to survive.

[Sally Hope]

So you've got the idea of an end, but you're clueless about the beginning. Way to go, boy! As for my idea, I first need to know exactly what we're writing: poem, story, chapter, blah, blah, blah ...

[Dani The Unreviewed]

story, with (hopefully loads of not too long, not too short chapters.)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

and i do have ideas for beginning...

[Sally Hope]

Oooooh....Now, let's start with the genre. What exactly are you thinking? (Just a gist; not the whole stuff).

[Dani The Unreviewed]

zombie plague. short enough?

[Sally Hope]

I'd say a two-word idea IS short enough. Zombies ... Hmm. Need to read some of that stuff, now; never much of a fan of those brain-eating clowns.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

i know all bout em.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I'll be back later...

[Sally Hope]

Okay, Terminator. Be back.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Im back. just been on the phone with my boyfriend. okay, now back at tha story...

[Sally Hope]

ZOMBIE PLAGUE ALERT!!!!!!!!!

[Sally Hope]

BTW (Yay! I'm using acronyms! You've officially ruined me), shouldn't we discuss this through messages, instead of comments? Just wonderin'.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

argh... damn zombies... *loads shotgun...*

[Dani The Unreviewed]

ok
mssg me.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

well sent a message. anyway, I'll be done with the first draft of the introduction by tomorrow.

[B. Boileau]

I love this piece. Thought invoking and inspirational.
A.myriad of reflection that says... you are not alone in these same thoughts. Thank you for sharing
bill

[Sally Hope]

Thank you for those kind words, Bill. They really mean a lot.

[SuspectGray]

They say you see what you believe....nothing could be truer within this poem. Time for some to change their beliefs and for others to re-affirm.

[Sally Hope]

Thank you so much for stopping by. It means a lot.

[Valentine]

Good thoughts. Some true, others some we might want to make true. Valentine

[Sally Hope]

Thank you so much for taking the time to read this. It truly means a lot.

[Willard Wells]

Beautifully written directions for so many that are lost within there own mind. And truly the image we see is not always the image others see. Great work.

[Sally Hope]

Thank you so much for your heartfelt, kind words. I'm grateful that you took the time to read it; it means a lot.

[Simon Welsh]

Huh. You're a good writer. Looking forward to reading more.

[Sally Hope]

Thanks for stopping by :)

[BlaqkShadow]

Very powerful poem, my favourite bit is
"Have you seen your reflection under a clear blue sky,
And wondered: Is it the reflection that is obscured, or, am I?
Have you counted the steps to your home,
And found you are a bit further away than you were a moment ago?"
I love these line, I can relate to the feeling behind the words, when you cannot figure out if you are broken or not. Brilliantly done, keep writing! X

[Sally Hope]

Glad that you liked it. Thanks for stopping by :)

[Insight "MH"]

In my opinion, this poem focuses on presenting the ugly truth of the lives of most people who concentrate on their appearance and forget what really matters which is their essence. This poem is really good and full of thought provoking questions. Thank you for sharing.

Insight.

[Sally Hope]

Thank you, Insight, for taking the time to read it.

[Insight "MH"]

You are welcome.