Little drops

My heart is out there dancing in the rain...

Little drops of sunshine
Peeking out the clouds
As eager as this heart of mine
That watches with delight.
Little drops of rainfall
Dripping down the clouds
Runnig through and wetting all
Life and life with-outs.
Little drops of childish dreams
Play inside my mind
"Get out there" my soul screams,
And my heart dances itself out.
Little drops of despair so deep
Trickle down my eyes
My happy heart sees me weep
But still does the perfect chasse
Little drops of rainbows, now
Wish to see the dance,
Gliding with the winds of love,
My heart puts on a smile.
Little drops of mighty rain
Drench my heart with cold,
But I stand here here, alone in pain
So dry, yet so very wet...

Author's Note

Thank you all for your awesome reviews!

Reviews

[Abdul Aziz]

This is beautiful. I daresay this is the best poem of yours I've read yet. And partly, that is because of the flow. There are no abrupt jerks to be seen here, and the whole poem is mellifluous. I like the concept too. I was hooked by the first line "Little drops of sunshine".. it is very creative, contradictory, and wonderful. The fact that you've avoided the use of excessive rhyme lends a good tone to the poem, and keeps it from sounding repetitive. The conclusion is perfect.

P.S. "Little drops of despair so deep
Trickles down my eyes".. trickles should be "Trickle"

and similarly, "Little drops of mighty rain
Drenches my heart with cold,".. drenches should be "drench"

Great job with this! :)

[Adam :P]

i wrote a poem about rain to and other stuff along with it.
but i like yours alot better beautifal poem

[Joy]

Great poem, good imagery. Keep writing! :)

[Angel Veselinov]

Interesting piece :) good rhyming :) Little drops of talent :P

[Marie Harrison]

This is very sweet. I could see this being a cute poem for children. Especially if you had a caricature artist draw a few humorous sketches of some rain drops. It's a very endearing poem.

[FocusedAmnesia]

I love the whole concept of the "little drops...". Also, it doesn't seem repetitive. The last two lines really bring it home. A perfect ending. This was a good read.

[Hamkar]

I find this amazing. Your heart has a great personality. I like how you are sad, but technically happy as well, but your heart isn't connected and you only feel the pain. It's difficult to explain, and you've done it perfectly. Thanks for entering it in the contest too, Good Luck!