Green

A woman's tears.

Thirteen hundred and seven million years before,
A cosmic cataclysm had come ashore.
After thirteen hundred and four million years,
She was born, from the lord God's tears.
The seven oceans, she wore for a dress,
The mountains, she tied as her hair, none the less.
She smiled a while, to see rainbows
And every time she dances, the wind blows.
Her skin and touch was a lustrous green
rippling with freckles, so hardly seen.
And thirteen hundred million years later,
Man came to rule her, forever after.
She was slaved to serve his surreal will,
But his thirst for destruction isn't quenched still.
Her pure greens are no longer greens,
But dirty brown and grayish screens.
The once wide and mighty rivers,
Are, by a curse of heavens, dying out in slivers.
And alone she cries, our sweet sweet mother
And we keep listening to her strain another...

Author's Note

My sincere thanks to Dinesh, I owe you one friend!

Reviews

[Dinesh Sairam]

"The mountains, she tied as her hair, in a mess."

I just felt this line seemed forced. There are not much other glitches that I find.

"And thirteen hundred million years later,
Man came to rule her, forever after.
She was slaved to serve his surreal will,
But his thirst for destruction isn't quenched still."

Haha, this has been the battle of sides from the very beginning, I guess. We preach you, you preach us, lol. But I really liked the way you put it.

I also loved the repetition 'Sweet sweet' :)

A read worthwhile.. :) And I take the credit for first review :D :)

Keep writing.

[JelliFyshKissUs]

So beautiful sad and heartfelt. Good job. And thank you, Dinesh, for helping.

[Abdul Aziz]

I think this is a good interpretation of the title given. From what I understand, these words are the tears shed by Nature upon being destroyed by man. The imagery is good, and the rhyme is good too, despite appearing to be forced at just a few places. It doesn't detract from the effect of the poem though. I would just tell you to look into the tense forms you use in this poem. There are just a few glitches.
For instance,
"She smiled a while, to see rainbows
And every time she dances, the wind blows."
The abrupt change in tense to suit the rhyme seems a tad forced. You may want to look into that.
Aside that, I think this poem is very well written, and, as I said, is a very original interpretation of the title.
Very good job!

[Cheryl Williams]

Wow, this is beautiful with stunning imagery. Well done!

[Adelia Alighieri]

I enjoyed reading this, I love the way you put the effect of a story in it. Very nice. :)

[Angel Veselinov]

Great Write :) really enjoyed it. I just only felt a bit negativism to MAN :) not man kind ( may be i am wrong) just curious :) Awesome flow and use of words :) Thanks for sharing indeed profound and touching piece :)

[Sara]

great poem, beautiful, with a very relevant message... i especially like the first two lines and the alliteration 'cosmic cataclysm' :)

[FocusedAmnesia]

Very well written.

"She smiled a while, to see rainbows
And every time she dances, the wind blows."

I love those two lines. I also like the reference of the battle between man and woman. This was a great read.

[Lost, n'MT]

Wow, this is the type of poetry that just blows me away... AMAZINGLY written piece with absolutely fantastic and wonderfully illustrated imagery. Great flow, great content, great job. Thank you for sharing this writing, I look forward to reading more of your writings.