Ellusions: Prologue

Silently we sat silhouetted  in a dim porch light.  We were quite still, much so it probably makes you wonder if we were living or just very detailed sculptures that somehow became misplaced. However, We are living. I promise. We sit so cold and stiff because of tension, the deep tension that lies between us.

Finally i let out the sigh i was holding in for quite a while, temporarily weakening the pressure. I think she took this opportunity to speak.

"So... i guess this is the last time we look at the night sky together, huh?" Annie said to me, her voice faltering on the last syllable.

"What? Is that like some hidden way of saying you don`t think we will meet again? Thats so silly! I mean, come on we are best friends, its inevitable that we WILL."  I laughed reassuringly although i wasn't sure myself. "And actually, the sky can be quite reassuring even when your alone."

 Annie twisted her head sideways and looked towards the stars as if trying to see something not visible to the naked eye. "How?" She finally inquired.

"Well, no matter where you are what is the one thing that stays the same?"

"Oh thats an easy one!" Annie stated confidently, "My hair. No matter where i am - or how much i try to straiten it- its always frizzes back five minutes later!"

"The sky," I sighed, purposely ignoring Annie`s last comment,"Before my father left for the military he said two things to me. The first thing he said was 'listen to your mother'. Then he told me 'Remember, it doesn't matter if i am all the way in Korea. If you feel lonely, just look to the heavens and know we are looking at the same sky. Then you won`t be alone anymore.'"

 I waited for Annie to compliment what i thought was the most witty and beautiful thing i have said in our whole friendship but she never did. It was then that i at last  pried my beady little eyes away from the heavens to look into Annie`s. Though her eyes were glued to the ground i could tell she was on the verge of tears. I quickly looked away.

I knew it was hard for her, It was hard for me too! Before i met Annie we were both loners. I was the girl that sat in the corner reading large novels. The girl that could be standing right in front of you and yet you still would still see right through her like she was not even there. As for Annie most people noticed her the second she entered the room, she stuck out like a sour thumb with her flaming red hair and rather eccentric sense of style. The problem was that nobody ever really wanted to talk to her. So the quiet one and the weird one had become friends by some twisted fate, and now here we were being torn apart by the same cruel forces.

Annie suddenly lifted her head and her expression brightened. She pulled two shiny purple bracelets from her pocket and placed one around her own hand. Then proceeded to place the second carefully around mine. 

"This," She said. "Is our friendship bracelet. It has the power to keep ties of friendship even through the boundaries of distance." 

 I looked down at my new bracelet,  patterns of of little purple dancing bears were imprinted in it. I smiled. Annie smiled warmly back at me but it didn't reach her worried eyes. I don`t think my smile did either.

That night, i truly thought i would never see my friend again. It seemed that behind the walls of my small hometown was an endless abyss of nothing. I thought as soon as i stepped past its borders i too would be apart of that emptiness.

"So this is the end," I though to myself

Little did i know it was only the beginning.

Author's Note

tell me ANY mistakes. Or anything i do to make the mood or over all writing better :)

Reviews

[TBPopper]

Well to be honest that first sentence really threw me. I reread it several times trying to understand what you were trying to say. I finally settled on assuming you meant silhouetted and moved on. Sorry if it's something really obvious and my eyes are just betraying me.

Other-wise, I liked the overall piece. The spacing was a bit annoying. Those first few paragraphs didn't have spaces between them but the rest did. You used double quotes beginning the second quote from the father (within dialogue) but ended with a single quote, whereas the first was in single quotes. Lower case I's here and there.

In the sentence 'I waited for Annie to complement...' you misspelled compliment, and you typed 'must' instead of 'most'.

Sorry if that seems harsh, I mostly focused on those little things. I'm also not dreadfully fond of first person perspective, so it might just be me over-criticizing. But I did like the overall feel, and the dialogue seemed like something I could actually imagine people saying, which is always good.

[Ann]

@TBPopper oh my spelling is dreadfully horrible! It always has been. I knew i spelled silhouetted wrong (it was underlined in red on my spell check) but i searched everywhere and couldn't find the correct spelling. I`m lucky that i even have spell check or nobody would understand ANYTHING. haha. But anyway i think i`ll go fix those mistakes you pointed out now. Thank you, the little things do count :)