Half Full

As time passes by the smoke burns my eyes

So f**k the lies and the wonder whys 

Too many tries just turn to unlimited cries 

Hellos turn into goodbyes that start to rise 

To what we know love defies

Not only does it soar it flies

And passes us by 

Like a little caterpillar into a beautiful butterfly 

But what lives always has to die....

To like or to hate 

Just a f*****g mental debate 

And stupid useless thoughts to rate 

Like opening a gate 

That leads to no where and everywhere 

And up there and down here 

My mind blocked by shield of hair and skull 

Go ahead take a stab your knife is dull

Pain is my fuel my fists are my fire 

If you wanna fight thats my desire 

You are the consumer the buyer

F**k you this situation just got dire!

Author's Note

This is my first attempt at a poem with this sort of rhyming structure.
Yeah, thats what I'd call it.

Reviews

[Snow412]

Well, you succeeded in rhyming. So angry, you are! hahaha
Maybe your frustration about having to structure your thoughts and emotions frustrated you. :P
Interesting ideas and nice flow though. Very well done.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

the structure works perfectly with gut wrenching rhythmic poetic scream~