Poetics: A Look Spells Paradise

Poetics: A Look Spells Paradise

A Poem by Amanda Granger

A look can say a thousand words, 
     and your eyes are always talking so much. 

A kiss can spell a lifetime, 
      and oh how I long for our lips to meet, to touch. 
Introductions won’t be awkward, not at all, 
       and I think they will force time to fall in line 
and pass more carefree than ever before.


You look at me, 

        and I see the sea, its distant shores
beckoning me and calling me home.
        I see promises so-long and so-far kept,
and promises that have yet to be made
        but when they are, I know they will be met,
and met well, serendipitous as the way we met. 

A hand held is a hand well kept,
       and I desire the warmth of your skin against mine
like the feel of a sun set and its light lying on my skin.
       I know our season is coming soon,
and I will have you; you will hold me,
       but time doesn't pass carelessly;
and they tell me only time will tell,
       but all along I hear what time’s been telling me
in soft, rushed whispers (it’s whispering your name)
        and comforting words: nothing lasts forever.

I’d rather a look from you than a thousand words
        from Father Time and a kiss from you than
a billion sunsets by the seashore,

and I can see it now:


The moon is wane and gold,
     the night is dark and cold,
          and your hand is mine to hold:
      you’re mine and I’m yours yet we’re neither
              here nor there as the wind rushes past
       the window, harsh and strong, but inside,
             we feel neither, gathered round a fire
                  listening to owls conspire with hoots
                       and icicles forming on the roof
              as the fire crackles in front of us,
       and I feel your body like a furnace itself
            under the blanket, with nothing under it
            but skin and hands and feet and love
            to share and time to spare to keep us warm
            and rested and at ease and stories
            to tell with our eyes and lips
            and fingertips.


It’s so clear, like the moon in that dream sky.
       And your eyes say you can see it too.

I’d follow you, never asking why,
       wherever you go to see you,

because the moon moves
       but never loses its place
in the sky;

You will never lose your place
        in my heart. 

© 2013 Amanda Granger


Author's Note

Amanda Granger
Edited the form. :)

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I love this so much. I love the rhyme-scheme and the way the structure changes towards the end. The imagery is wonderful and really enhances each and every emotional nuance - and this is certainly an poem inundated with very real, palpable emotion. You're brilliant.

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Just thought I'd post another review considering you've changed the form: It feels more powerful now, if that makes sense. Form and aesthetics are important to me as a reader, personally, and I really love the changes you've made. It flows better, reads easier, and each line stands out more than it did before. Well done, love.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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so very romantic this is.. i thoroughly enjoyed it

yes, the look spells a thousand words thats for sure.. but the well penned affection is lasting as well.. its a rare and personal art that can at least keep one until your eyes can again, meet and exchange their fondness once again..

very nice piece

Antonio


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Amanda Granger

11 Years Ago

That is all so very true. :) It really sends your mind wandering and your imagination over-flowing, .. read more
Antonio Valentino

11 Years Ago

you're very welcome Amanda, it was my pleasure
You have found a kind of paradise Amanda, I think it's inside of you there.

The sweetness in your words is extendable.

I would have proffered to read this in little stanzas, but that's just a superficial preference.

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Amanda Granger

11 Years Ago

Wow, thank you so much! I think I might play with it a bit and see about breaking it into stanzas (i.. read more
This was an amazing flow of love and visual dreaminess! You have woven are weave of words that capture the heart and soul and take them along for a beautiful ride upon the winds of joy and memory.

Great Ink!
Aaron

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2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I love this so much. I love the rhyme-scheme and the way the structure changes towards the end. The imagery is wonderful and really enhances each and every emotional nuance - and this is certainly an poem inundated with very real, palpable emotion. You're brilliant.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Amanda Granger

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