A Friend Who .........

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

My friend

 

As thoughts struggle in my mind
To escape its trying
With him only i share and never hide
Stress evaporates and is slowly dying

 

As desperation squeezes my heart
To blackland trying to pull
He opens to mea path of light
My heart with peace is full

 

I sit there feeling low and weak
Mind is gloomy, heart bleeds
Only your help i seek
As its the only thing i need

 

With you my heart found serenity
With you i feel complete
Having you is my peace for eternity
Having you grief i'll never meet

 

 

But.....
You never existed ........

Author's Note

Thanks in advance for everyone who read, rated and reviewed.

Reviews

[Nath]

Plainly amazing. At first it appears to be a very hopeful, positive poem, but with the turning point in the last two lines, the whole situation becomes very depressing when rereading the first part.
At times we need to open up to people we trust, even if they seem to be not as "trustworthy" as our ideal of the one faithful friend we are hoping for should be. We cannot find someone we trust fully with out taking a risk and start trusting someone we have faith in, even if we don't trust them with everything yet, but maybe we come to do so with time. Talking about it sure can help get through rough times.
Wonderful poem, good flow.

[msharma]

Great interwoven of emotions and thoughts,lovely write up.

[VNH]

Perhaps it is best for the ideal to never exist,
lest we be betrayed by high expectations.

Well written, I hope to read more of this!

[Chris]

"But....
You never spoke......"

So much silence exists
- filled with unspoken words -
in our world. ~

...yours drew my mind along and once on the way it was a 'gentle' walk.

[The XYZ Writer]

Wow, what a sad poem. I was shocked at the end. But....You never existed........
It's so hard to have to bottle up the pain and never tell anyone. I really hope you find that person soon, because it truly makes things a lot easier. :)

Great write Natty!

[Jordan's Back]

With you my heart found serenity
With you i feel complete
Having you is my peace for eternity
Having you grief i'll never meet


But.....
You never existed ........

So sad... he ill exist for you someday.

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful emotion in this poem. I had to read a few times. The surprise ending left me with wonder and question.
"He opens to me a path of light
My heart with peace is full"
Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Irfan Bashir Shah]

Beauty!
The ending was never really unexpected.... Brilliantly done....
The loneliness of life when there is no one to hold your hand..... This was utterly perfect...

[Amila Jay]

As desperation squeezes my heart
To blackland trying to pull
He opens to mea path of light
My heart with peace is full

This is great:-)

[BlueDreams]

very sweet write it is :-) keep it up ..

[Arielle Ann]

the strong desire to be understood, cared and loved by that someone who doesnt even exist! this is a work only of imagination without the other even present...hats off on such a beautiful creativity!