Betrayal Tears

Tears refuse to leave my eye

Tears fight not to roll down my cheeks

Tears oppose me and don't let me cry

Though I've been trying for weeks

 

Loneliness is eating me

My heart is bound

What may make me free

I tried and searched and never found

 

Once with you I thought I found myself

I wouldn’t let it leave

But I was just trying

To collect water in a sieve

 

You promised to hold my hand

And lead me through my life

But you left me half way

A lonely heart stabbed by a knife

 

Lonely with tears in eyes

Refuse to fall

I know I’d be betrayed

But by my tears, I never expected it at all

Author's Note

Its just a poem of a moment.
I was just trying to vent my feelings out.

Reviews

[Nath]

Really good frame that the first and last stanza form, with the tears disobeying when you want them to come, refusing to let you release the sadness this way and finding comfort.
Loneliness is a horrible feeling.
I loved the line "Once with you I thought I found myself", an amazing one.
You conveyed your feelings skilledly, keep it up!

[Ms.Bri]

..I felt every emotion in this poem. i have had times like this no matter how much u try u can't cry. Great write. definitely could see that you were venting. keep writing.

[An owl on the moon]

Filled with emotional angst, your words sing a sadness over time... the pain of beauty turned to ashes within... Powerful.

[Alex Vidmar]

I love this Natty. Very heartfelt and beautifully well written. I look forward to reading more. (and just so you know, I did write all of The Violent Carousel)

Peace Natty,

Alex

[Raven Starhawk]

Sometimes love does seem so cruel and the heart breaks, still hungers for it and that in itself can feel like betrayal. Anyway I liked this poem.

[Amata Luna]

This is a very powerful poem. A different view why some people can't just cry. Loneliness is really a knife that cuts into the heart. Though you bleed, you bled fast you can't cry any more. You did great with having your feelings leashed out.

[Coyote Poetry]

Tears mean we can still feel. A sad poem. When love teaches us a bad lesson. Hard for us to understand. I like the complete poem. A strong ending to the outstanding poem.
Coyote