Betrayal Tears

Tears refuse to leave my eye

Tears fight not to roll down my cheeks

Tears oppose me and don't let me cry

Though I've been trying for weeks

 

Loneliness is eating me

My heart is bound

What may make me free

I tried and searched and never found

 

Once with you I thought I found myself

I wouldn’t let it leave

But I was just trying

To collect water in a sieve

 

You promised to hold my hand

And lead me through my life

But you left me half way

A lonely heart stabbed by a knife

 

Lonely with tears in eyes

Refuse to fall

I know I’d be betrayed

But by my tears, I never expected it at all

Author's Note

Its just a poem of a moment.
I was just trying to vent my feelings out.

Reviews

[Nath]

Really good frame that the first and last stanza form, with the tears disobeying when you want them to come, refusing to let you release the sadness this way and finding comfort.
Loneliness is a horrible feeling.
I loved the line "Once with you I thought I found myself", an amazing one.
You conveyed your feelings skilledly, keep it up!

[just is]

So full of vivid emotions thorughout
nicely done

[AK]

It's beautiful! The loneliness and desolateness radiated by the poem is wonderful! It was exhilarating!

[Irfan Bashir Shah]

A nice poem filled with emotions....
Tears.... they really are traitors ... They betray you always....
Nicely penned down!

[Michael Thrower]

Awww, I'm sorry for what ever happened :/ But this is a great poem. I love the flow, it was a fairly easy read. Hope to read more of what you have to offer! Keep up the good work :P

[Allen Smuckler]

...and vent you did, natty...as we all must do from time to time
very descriptive and heartfelt write
loved the line "collect water in a sieve"...that pretty much sums it up
beautifully written
allen

[The XYZ Writer]

I'm really late on this one. Sorry bout that!
That was a really powerful poem. I liked the rhyme scheme, it just seemed to flow. The emotions are exactly what I was feeling a couple days ago, so this really connects to me. :) Loved it!

[Mohamed Hani]

Awesome

[Tai Ryens]

The structure of the poem is nice and simple, so was the wording, but emotions flow with the lines smoothly as well. I know how you feel, having the emotion of loneliness, and it's really quite a torturous and horrible feeling.
Nice job, keep it up!

[Mohamed Hani]

i just love this... 100/100

[Amila Jay]

This is awesome:-)