Invisible Man
A Poem by
Sahar moonlight
Invisible man
Muted voice
Ignored feelings
Used and used
Shattered dreams
Blackness and darkness
Bitterness and sorrow
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I'm visible man
Raised my voice
Expressed my feelings
Marked my identity
Dreamt to achieve
With hope and light
Sweetness and happiness
© 2012 Sahar moonlight
Author's Note
I am not sure if this is considered a poem.
some times my mind needs to get on to a paper.... just as it is with no change.
That was the result.
Reviews
it starts with despair then ends with hope. there's conflict in this poem and resolution in this poem that makes it an excellent piece. great job.
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
If this doesn't qualify as a poem I don't know what does.
Posted 12 Years Ago
If this doesn't qualify as a poem I don't know what does.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
A great write:)
Posted 12 Years Ago
A great write:)
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
It's so true. People can be invisible and visible depending on the day. I love the format and the words are simple yet to the point.
Posted 12 Years Ago
It's so true. People can be invisible and visible depending on the day. I love the format and the words are simple yet to the point.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
the contrast presented in so few a lines was worth putting ink onto paper..and I dream to be only the latter facet of the man :)
Posted 12 Years Ago
the contrast presented in so few a lines was worth putting ink onto paper..and I dream to be only the latter facet of the man :)
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Polar opposites, yin and yang, light and dark. Your piece takes and places us upon the scales and lets us see that there are two sides to everything, two ways to see a situation and always more than one option.
Great Ink!
Aaron
Posted 12 Years Ago
Polar opposites, yin and yang, light and dark. Your piece takes and places us upon the scales and lets us see that there are two sides to everything, two ways to see a situation and always more than one option.
Great Ink!
Aaron
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
There are two sides to every coin...You have depicted both sides of the coin in a very poignant way. Nicely done!
Posted 12 Years Ago
There are two sides to every coin...You have depicted both sides of the coin in a very poignant way. Nicely done!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
This poem really made me think. I had to read it a few times to understand it. Other than that I found it very interesting
Posted 12 Years Ago
This poem really made me think. I had to read it a few times to understand it. Other than that I found it very interesting
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Interesting piece of poetry!
Posted 12 Years Ago
Interesting piece of poetry!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I really enjoy this. I love how you put just thoughts down; amazing! Perfectly done Natty!
Peace
Posted 12 Years Ago
I really enjoy this. I love how you put just thoughts down; amazing! Perfectly done Natty!
Peace
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Added on January 7, 2012
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Sahar moonlight France
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Hello everybody.
Here is Sahar. I am from Lebanon living in France.
I'm a mathematician but sometimes I find in myself the will to write something.
I enjoy reading a lot and I was glad to join this..
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