Invisible Man

Invisible man

Muted voice

Ignored feelings

Used and used

Shattered dreams

Blackness and darkness

Bitterness and sorrow

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I'm visible man

Raised my voice

Expressed my feelings

Marked my identity

Dreamt to achieve

With hope and light

Sweetness and happiness

 

Author's Note

I am not sure if this is considered a poem.
some times my mind needs to get on to a paper.... just as it is with no change.
That was the result.

Reviews

[Mockingbird]

it starts with despair then ends with hope. there's conflict in this poem and resolution in this poem that makes it an excellent piece. great job.

[Ezekiel Silver]

If this doesn't qualify as a poem I don't know what does.

[Amila Jay]

A great write:)

[Destiny]

It's so true. People can be invisible and visible depending on the day. I love the format and the words are simple yet to the point.

[Arielle Ann]

the contrast presented in so few a lines was worth putting ink onto paper..and I dream to be only the latter facet of the man :)

[Wolfwind]

Polar opposites, yin and yang, light and dark. Your piece takes and places us upon the scales and lets us see that there are two sides to everything, two ways to see a situation and always more than one option.

Great Ink!
Aaron

[Robbie~xoxo~]

There are two sides to every coin...You have depicted both sides of the coin in a very poignant way. Nicely done!

[Daenerys]

This poem really made me think. I had to read it a few times to understand it. Other than that I found it very interesting

[Sujash I. Purna]

Interesting piece of poetry!

[Alex Vidmar]

I really enjoy this. I love how you put just thoughts down; amazing! Perfectly done Natty!

Peace