Prologue

Prologue of my book.

Prologue

 

For ages, men have spoken in hushed tones about that most evil of all creatures, the Devil. He is ruler of Hell, that fiery realm to which tainted souls are sent to burn. The Devil has taken many forms in the past, most notably that of a snake. In this guise he corrupted Eve and, in turn, corrupted Adam, and thus was condemned to slither about on the ground, never to be on the same level as man. But the Devil was not to be deterred.

He later returned to corrupt, and try to corrupt, others, most notably Jesus Christ. Christ, son of God that he was, resisted the Devil and spurned his attempts to turn Christ to the ways of darkness. Since biblical times he has seemingly retired to his kingdom, welcoming evil souls with a gleeful grin. But how much of this is truth, and how much is fabrication?

At the risk of subjecting myself to the objections of millions of Christians around the world, I suggest a new view of the Devil. What is there to say that the Devil enjoys his job? What is there to say that he is still as enthusiastic about his vocation as he was in Biblical times? Evil is not the same thing now as it was during the time of Christ, and who is to say that the Devil would not be disgusted by the filth that entered his realm?

So now, reader, I ask you a simple question. What if the Devil no longer wished to continue in his position as ruler of Hell?

Author's Note

The opening chapter for my book.

Reviews

[Taylor H]

is the next chapter not publsihed becasue your working on it? or did you not know??? ive read it already and its really good.

[Ashleigh]

This looks very intriguing. A little short, even for a prologue, but very attention-grabbing all the same.

I really like the concepts you've introduced here, so there only remains a few grammatical and structural errors.

"...that most evil of all creatures, the Devil." This misplaced comma should really be replaced by a semi-colon ( ; ).

"In this guise he corrupted Eve and, in turn, corrupted Adam, and thus was condemned to slither about on the ground, never to be on the same level as man. But the Devil was not to be deterred." Too many 'and's in one sentence can make it seem repetitive. I'd suggest changing this to "...corrupted Adam; thus, he was condemned..." Also, 'but' is a conjunction and therefore should never begin a sentence. I'd suggest replacing the period with a comma and decapitalizing 'But'.

One last suggestion I'd make is to indent your new paragraphs.

Very good beginning. I'm interested to see where you take this.

[Taylor H]

that was really good, and i would love to read the rest of it