Anxiety

Although I am in a silenced room, it is obnoxiously loud with thoughts and emotion. This strangeness in my chest, its unsettling yet familiar…something that happens right before the panic fully sets in. Something before I am taken away into an endless pit of questions and despair, something before I lose grasp of myself completely. The air struggles to fill my lungs as my body threatens to spasm uncontrollably as if being thrown around by invisible vile hands then I am completely enveloped within my demons, inside a monster that is my anxiety, inside a monster that is myself…

Reviews

[TheMalady]

The power of words mixed with emotions that rages within us - you definitely described the very emotion you wish to convey. Well-descriptive. I can sense the minute feeling poured into this piece of work. Silence. Another absolute thing, however, holds a lot of faces. Quite a remarkable work you have done! Great! Nice! :D

[Leon C]

I feel for you.

You have really done well to capture the feeling and emotions of a panic attack. The opening line is so provocative and steeped in emotion. Good Job.

I wonder whether shorter sentences might add to the drama of the piece by making it more punchy. Try replacing some of the commas with full stops and see how it reads. Just a thought.

Nice work

[Coyote Poetry]

Anxiety can kill us.
"The air struggles to fill my lungs as my body threatens to spasm uncontrollably as if being thrown around by invisible vile hands then I am completely enveloped within my demons, inside a monster that is my anxiety, inside a monster that is myself…"
I had to learn to meditate to defeat anxiety. Great description of the word anxiety. Thank you for sharing your excellent poetry.
Coyote