six things

1.Your hair parts
like the grass
on a wet day.
2.I have not seen
your hair
part in a while.
3.The bird bath
dances under
the snow
4.And the
rubbish sways,
too
5.How can I
sway?
6.Your hair parts
like the sea.

Author's Note

i can never hide my surprise.

Reviews

[Stammers]

I love how you can put a whole story into the perspective of one view yet not see it lose it's other characters, even though it is told by one personality, which in turn is manipulated to say a whole different thing entirely with the words, all to get back to that one story, that in the end is just saying one thing.

I love your writing? :)

[A. Amos]

Interesting and you bought smile...

[Sami Khalil]

Six things are six surprises...Thank you for penning...:)

[Collect-Eye]

Haz said it just right
It's really beautiful it truly is
so personal and concise and involved
so transcendent

ur work always humbles me

I've always been in awe of ur beauty inside and out

I'm in pain atm..but I'm no less in awe..I'm just deep in the sea and I need moses and jesus and you to come rescue me..or maybe I should just search the soul of this expansive sea and leave people alone for a while

you've captured something amazing..something so beautiful you feel every cell in ur body urging u to look away

that's good poetry..stuff that makes u truly feel

sometimes I only feel like I've accomplished something when I write a poem that makes me cry while writing it and after

so yea, trying to stay objective here