Half Baked Heart

A fight between heart and desire

Second step 

Towards me; naked 

With a heart of half baked 

Want to do it 

But afraid too. 

She want me 

But love him so much 

She is about to reach 

Yet, don't want it

Other side; want to do. 

Come, I Love You 

I never do it without you 

You are my love 

I know what I have to deserve 

So, listen your heart 

Don't come up in part.

Reviews

[Kim]

I like the message you're conveying. The uncertainty and hesitation is well shown. I also like the contrast between the two personalities in your poem; one is torn, uncertain of what to do or what she wants, the other knows not only what is desired but also what is deserved. Well done! :)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much.

[Eddie Phillips]

Choices define the human life. This is a great poem about duality and choice. It is told from teh inner mind and that makes it feel personal. I liked it. I would only suggest toning a few words to make it more readable. Ultimately, you hit the points that mattered.

[almost there]

duality & love do not go together. Someone is left hurt or both are left unsatisfied

[almost there]

duality & love do not go together. Someone is left hurt or both are left unsatisfied

[zunie frost]

i love it !!!! it rhymes very great !!!
good job

[Misty Blue Eyes]

Sorry it took so long to read this....the old tug o war with ones heart...I love it

[AYVID N]

There should be no duality in love. Well expressed my friend.

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear...

[Sami Khalil]

You have portrayed this struggle marvelously. Glad to see you back...:)..................

[Saddam]

Thank you so much, Sir.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome....^)))))

[Johnson]

am thrilled by what this work portray,,,your great

[CHANDNI SETHI]

A person can only give himself/herself up completely in any given situation only when they don't have the reluctance in their heart. Nicely portrayed.

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend.