PROMISE

Story about two who made promise yet one forgot it.

PROMISE

08/10/2015

Under the beautiful shadowy tree

They made a promise to live together;

‘I’ll wait for you in wind or rain, sleet or snow

Nothing will keep you away from me forever’.

That was the promise made by them

But soon spring gone and autumn came;

One remembers the promise and lived it

But other forget it in own fame.

After several years of silence and distance

The met at place where it was made;

They looked each other with straight eyes

One was smiling though other was sad.

By saddam husen

14/10/2015

©2015saddamhusen

Author's Note

One was smiling though other was sad.

Reviews

[Mary Steffen]

Very good writing. Love the rhyming. Keep up the good work.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

well conveyed !loved reading it..
Promise is described so honestly

[Vikrantsingh]

A good write up dear. Its from starting till end an eye catcher. Well done!!

Let me share this on my facebook page :)..

Thank you again..

[Saddam]

Thanks a lot friend.

[Akansha]

I can relate to this.Nice lines! :)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much.

[almost there]

Currently going through this and it hurts so deeply. Thank you for the piece.

[Saddam]

Thank you so much friend..

[costa siwale]

a beautiful piece my friend

[Saddam]

Thanks Friend.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Interesting layout of your words.

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

You are welcome!

[Mary Christabel George]

Definitely it is for the readers to understand.
But the one who has gone through it can better relate.
What I take back is 'Promises were meant to be kept or meant to be broken'
Beautiful concept & wonderful representation.

[Saddam]

You are right but Promise must be kept and alive it forever, I mean it.
Thank you so much dear friend.

[sonnie ibadah]

the suspense!!!!!!!! i enjoyed it the poem and wished it were a little longer

[My Favorite Writer !]

So beautiful, loved the end..it made me think..which one would be happy and which one would be sad. There could be different attributes. Made me think a lot. Keep writing !