MOMENT OF BITTER-SWEETNESS

MOMENT OF BITTER-SWEETNESS

 

Moon light is gleaming

Soft wind is entwined with your hair;

Stars are blinking

Though your ear-rings are shinning as stars

 

So rendering existent it is

We had a fight with each other;

Both, we are looking through askance eyes

Enjoying this moment of sweet rancour

 

Filling night with glorious amenity

Infuriating me, you ring of bangles;

 Your smiles enthralling me warmly

And kisses allowing me to do didles.

By saddam husen

01/05/2015

©2015saddamhusen

Author's Note

All reviews welcome

Reviews

[Confuser]

Saddam: Love is bitter-sweet, what a great title and the poem is fun too. The visual of the moonlite breaking through her hair is nice, enticing, the earrings like the stars. Going through the lines of a silly fuss, that will soon be forgotten, and usually something to laugh about. Very sweet, romantic. I'm happy Sami, provided some help with grammar and wording, and he's correct, you do write with great pizazz...good imagery. Thanks so very much. Dale

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dale for your wonderful compliments.

[Confuser]

My pleasure.....Dale

[-Scribe in Style-]

A intriguing title pulled me into the page and the poem read up to its expectation. Well written
A

[Berbz]

Nice work. Love and quarrel, just like the two sides of a coin.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Beautiful Sweet and romantic.

Thank you for sharing.

God bless Benita

[MomzillaNC]

A little tussle that leads to making up… and deeper passion.

[Ana B.]

What a beautiful and passionate duet my dear! A splendid write :)

[Avinash]

The small fights with someone you love often take things to the deeper level. The moment which you have created with your words is extremely beautiful.

[Lyndy]

Beautiful poem well written! Well done.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Playful and different at the same time.
Look at your spelling and placement in your revision of this. Just a thought from me.
Your second stanza is very strong and wise.
But, the other two fall down a little, and I would rewrite and try for more here.
Your title is intriguing.

[Penny]

Wish that happened for real :) Very sweet buddy. Nice work.

[Saddam]

Dhanyawad dost.....

[Penny]

My pleasure..

[micky]

This is so beautiful Saddam

[Saddam]

Thanks a lot dear.....