TWO VIEWS

I

Tell me, what’s on in our society?

Which community stand fast for anyone?

Who has embellished or what make her proudy

They have an eye, not for praise but criticism.

They just don’t care who has ruined;

They feel entertainment on this unfortunation.

II

When in our heart the fire of melice burnt

A big part of our world destroyed

Lifestyle, culture, dynasty, grandiosity existent

And the other entire thing affected by it.

When a brother took a sword for estrangement

The whole race lament at his decision.

By saddam husen

09/05/2015

Reviews

[-Scribe in Style-]

Definitely an outstanding format that matches both the title and the message.
Good work :)

[Botania]

"When a brother took a sword for estrangement the whole race lament at his decision." Very important here. Nice work.

[Avinash]

Men have a tendency to exploit the weak but that was acceptable when he was not living in civilization. I do not see difference between people who suppress another, they are all the same in every place. They do not have a moral code and they do not definitely have a religion.

[Penny]

For what is going on today in our country, and the world too... nicely written. Thought provoking poem.

[nazia]

This reminds me of one of the poems of Rabindranath Tagore. The essence is so pure and beautiful, the effort so genuine. you are surpassing your own excellence with every passing day :)

[Saddam]

Oh wow!! such a warm compliment dear. Thank you so much.

[Jeyanthi]

I really like the insight of this write... :)

[Elisa]

This is so true, especially with the criticism of people based on their appearances. It's crazy how so much hate can stem from someone just looking at someone's external aesthetic. It's a pretty sad fact about the world we live in, and I'm very impressed that you chose to express it in a poem!

[Jamestown]

Well expressed here, I know where your going with this piece and your
thought process is fantastic, there is not enough doing good being done
in any society, but judgement is fast and first hand, very thought provoking:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Robert Vicens]

Ideas are great. Would love to see them made concrete by metaphors-- concrete emotive comparisons between physical objects that communicate those feelings you felt.

[Confuser]

Saddam: Your asking a Mother, a Grandmother that thinks politics are crazy, but the human beings are responsible for compassion, for humanity for giving to others. You are correct, criticism comes quickly and personally, there's no pride in that...Some people do not care and it's sad...Society's are ruined by decisions of the few. It sounds like you're frustrated. Thanks....Dale