DEAR DOLL

DEAR DOLL

 

Dear doll; from where you are coming?

You are looking cute in that pink dress;

With one hand little blue umbrella is dancing

Though another is busy with Hakusen

 

Dear doll; a special smile is playing on your face

What is the secret of your bright eyes?

They are wandering, from one spot to another place

It seems you have got something priceless prise.

 

Yes! I am undeniably happy with my solitude

For now I was in hallow universe of love;

That love, which every time was hurting my attitude

I said, “Go to hell”; and now I feel top of above.

_____ saddam husen

06/04/2015

©saddamhusen2015

Author's Note

Hakusen= Japanese Hand fan

Reviews

[Confuser]

Saddam: Sounds like you got burnt pretty badly...and poetry is a wonderful way of expressing that pain. I hope you've recovered.....do like my Dad told me, don't look for the pretty ones. He said, "Find an Ugly Man, he'll treat you well." Seriously he did and chuckled. Nice poem, and with lines like I am undeniably happy with my solitude tells me you felt just the opposite. Thank you...Dale

[Saddam]

that's great. Thank you so much for this wonderful review.

[Confuser]

You're welcome!....Dale

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

very cute nd beautiful poem

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear.....

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

your welcome g

[Ruth]

Sometimes we have to stand back and see things for how they are, never an easy process but the light at the end of the tunnel is a welcome sight :)

[Kousika]

The poem is concise but cute ... Thanks for making it read.. :)))

[Prashant Pandey]

lines were as cute as the doll. liked this piece.

[Amal N]

Loved it! Beautiful poem, good job :)

[Jeyanthi]

Very nice. I love this font :D

I like the sarcasm of doll's response too:P

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend....

[nazia]

Ha :D I like that optimism of being happy in solitude. Great work Saddam. Its always nice to read your work :)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend...

[Elisa]

I like the finality of the last two lines, which make it seem like you're almost taunting the doll referenced to in the earlier lines (at least, that's my own personal interpretation.) nice job!

[Saddam]

Thank you dear... It means great for me, You found it so.

[Sami Khalil]

"I am undeniably happy with my solitude
For now I was in hallow universe of love;
That love, which every time was hurting my attitude"

Wow. You are treating ladies harshly but with love. They do need an umbrella from your storms...Lol
A very good one my friend. In the US they will call you a mean little rascal...:)......

[Saddam]

Hahahaa............ Thank you so much Sir.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome poet...:).......

[Deepika]

A very cute poem Saddam :) Last two lines were hilarious :D

[Saddam]

It was in my mind for long times.... Thanks dear.