Eyes on me

But everywhere I felt Eyes on me. It is real............

EYES ON ME................................... by SADDAM HUSEN

When I was a kid

There was interest little bit

About toxication

 

It was in my mood

“It is a supplement good

For health”

 

I bought tobacco one day

I remember that was day

Of celebration

 

Surprised act for shop-keeper

He fired on me questionnaire

Of its essential

 

I deceive him with lie

I searched many place for unpacked it

But everywhere I felt Eyes on me

A snare bound my hand

It forced me, I could not open it.

Author's Note

I have never taste any kind of "Nasha" (drug, intoxication) and pray for other not to do that.

Reviews

[Irenic]

But everywhere I felt Eyes on me
A snare bound my hand
It forced me, I could not open it.

a poem which which give us the message about existence of god-------- for me.
Like others i will say you are religious and your poem dropped into the bottom of my heart. the last three lines makes me to realize that i commit sins without thinking about him and his eyes towards me.

thank you for writing such a reality realizing poem.

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend. You can say but I'm not that kind of religious but Thank you so much for your stopping dear. I appreciate your words.

[Irenic]

you are welcome :)

[Destiny Dreamer]

WOW! Good for YOU. Amazing write! :)

[Confuser]

Saddam: You are compasionate and that's a wonderful quality....Eye on me is a wonderful title...sounds like guilt caught up with you. You knew it was wrong and in our mind, maybe even like Karma, the shame comes back, like when you wrote..
A snare bound my hand
It forced me, I could not open it.

[Saddam]

Thank you so much Dale,

[Confuser]

You're welcome!!

[Sami Khalil]

I like your message for it is looking after the welfare of others. It shows your great concern for them. Now the eyes will be on you...Excellent...:)................

[Saddam]

Thank you so much Sir, for this kind review.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)....

[B]

Interesting

Self-doubt can be a drug too

A dangerous one

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend....

[The dark story]

No matter where we are…no matter where we hide ourselves,we will be always watched by those Eyes. I really liked the way you have penned it…simple but strong with its diction.
Nice piece.thanks for sharing.

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend. It is sure.

[AYVID N]

Brilliantly told Saddam. The best watchman or doorkeeper is within us. Its ultimately up to us. Thanks for the great message.

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear. You got it right, we are the master of own fate.

[AYVID N]

You are most welcome Saddam...

[AYVID N]

You are most welcome Saddam...

[AYVID N]

You are most welcome Saddam...

[Zanne]

'But everywhere I felt eyes on me' a feeling I know all too well, I liked this. :)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear for your visit and review.

[Zahra]

very well expressed. Drugs are one of the greatest tragedies around and common for young people to fall for it. Very important to make them realize that's happiness and adventure lies in many other positive things. Good piece.

[Saddam]

You are right dear friend. Thank you so much for your kind visit

[Penny]

Amusing little story.. also nice rhythm. Nice attempt.

[Saddam]

Thank you so much bhai.

[Penny]

My pleasure..