AN EVENING

AN EVENING

A Poem by Saddam

At the time of evening

She was at opposite roof of him

And he was other side of road

Eyes were on each other

They were smiling for no reason.

 

Aware with the others, yet…

Hearts blooms when he sends flying kiss

She catches it

Cover her face with same hand.

 

When mislead wind play with her hair

That time her DUPATTA hovering

Making trouble

She tries it to hold properly

He smirked on her blend behavior

Girl snidely got angry

Stumpy turn around

Then he caught his ear with queer face

And she burst into laugh. 



© 2014 Saddam


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I like this poem and its ambience! Perfectly written and well done! :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


Its sweet and melodious love poem beautiful liked it SSADD.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

9 Years Ago

Thank you sweet friend for your kind visit and glad you like it.
love the cheesiness it really happens with the love birds here in Asia
Oh and the idea of adding original piece is good !

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much dear friend.............. You are very energetic.
Lenah Mehzabin

9 Years Ago

Oh haha thank u and welcome !
Sweet write!
Loved the original picture included!
-VM

Posted 9 Years Ago


A cute poem. A beautifully captured scene.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very well narrated Ssadd. I love the nuances and expressions in the poem. One small suggesstion...for Hindi words, please add a transalation in English, below the poem.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

9 Years Ago

Really I will do the same next time. Thanks for reading and reviewing it.
Such a cute and unquie poem. :-))

Kaze~

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

that's a cute poem making up for a lovely evening

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much dear friend....
Very unique poem. Loved the images I was getting in my head.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sweet and simple with good flow. Very well done!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much dear friend.

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RASRA, BALLIA, Uttar Pradesh, India



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