A GIRL IN WHITE GOWN

the girl is rejected by his lover and at the marriage date she ends her life because she loves him very much.

The moon was at his top stage

Everywhere was milky light

Stars were twinkled with rhythm of heart

Everything was beautiful that night.

 

But at one side, ajar, alone and sorrowful

She was at the river bank side

In the white gown and with moisture eyes

Her concentrate was at the floating moon light.

 

Her azure eyes with many drops of water

Was winking gradually, but no one was there

Dribbling drops making her gown dank and dark

But her grievances were unknown and unclear.

 

Suddenly some fireworks flashed into the sky

She aimlessly watches that with dormant sight

She swept away her tears and smiles

With slow walk she came on the weir

And without spending any moment

she jumped in to the river.

Author's Note

WAITING FOR THE REVIEW.....

Reviews

This is a good writing and flows so smoothly. The last line where she jumped in the river leads me to believe that she was standing up high... if not do you mean your visual to be here slowly gradually walking into the water or?
Nice read.. thank you..

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is so sad Ssaad.You have written this with so much imagery and emotion .Well done my dear :)

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

This poem was very creative, beautiful write.

Kaze~

[Shaquana Adams]

I really enjoyed the imagery here, it was very impacting. I admire your skills :)
-QuanaWana

[lissalovesyou]

Wow, great imagery. Something that really struck me was how the poem changes. It was a great blend of both positiveness and negativity. The first stanza was light and carefree. The second one was a little deeper and heavier. At the beginning of the last stanza, I was expecting a happy ending. So I want to clap you on the back for skillfully communicating that shock and surprise we feel when we learn of someone's suicide. The use of the word "fireworks" led to me thinking of celebration, but the ending was something different. Overall, I loved this, and keep it up!
lissalovesyou:)

[Saddam]

thanks dear for your courage full words, i appreciate you. as you think it has both mood. the girl is rejected by his lover and at the marriage date she ends her life because she loves him very much.

[lissalovesyou]

A tragic tale that is beautifully described.
lissalovesyou:)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear, you understand.

[Khushi]

Pain, sorrow and then suicide.. nice poem :)

[Saddam]

thank you dear......

[Honey-Bee]

Interesting moment expressed well in a beautiful! I hope she didn't drown or maybe that was the idea?

[melissa]

amazing poem keep up the great work i love the poem i hope you get published one day

[Sami Khalil]

"She was at the river bank side
In the white gown and with moisture eyes
Her concentrate was at the floating moon light."

You paint great images of your beloved, sir. Another applause for you,...:).....................

[Saddam]

thank you Sir.....

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)...................