A GIRL IN WHITE GOWN

the girl is rejected by his lover and at the marriage date she ends her life because she loves him very much.

The moon was at his top stage

Everywhere was milky light

Stars were twinkled with rhythm of heart

Everything was beautiful that night.

 

But at one side, ajar, alone and sorrowful

She was at the river bank side

In the white gown and with moisture eyes

Her concentrate was at the floating moon light.

 

Her azure eyes with many drops of water

Was winking gradually, but no one was there

Dribbling drops making her gown dank and dark

But her grievances were unknown and unclear.

 

Suddenly some fireworks flashed into the sky

She aimlessly watches that with dormant sight

She swept away her tears and smiles

With slow walk she came on the weir

And without spending any moment

she jumped in to the river.

Author's Note

WAITING FOR THE REVIEW.....

Reviews

This is a good writing and flows so smoothly. The last line where she jumped in the river leads me to believe that she was standing up high... if not do you mean your visual to be here slowly gradually walking into the water or?
Nice read.. thank you..

[EmilyBianca]

Reminds me of something I would do.

[Saddam]

Never do any like this. Life is change full so take a rest but do not stop. Thank you so much for review it.

[almost there]

I can honestly feel the pain while reading this and that is exactly what I love about your writing it makes me feel emotions that I have not experienced yet. Awesome job, love it!

[Saddam]

MANY AND HEARTILY THANK YOU SOO MUCH...

[Penny]

Nyc poem. Sad but still good. Pleasurable. Well done

[Kasey Miriam]

Sorry to take so long. I took a regreted leave from the cafe. Wonderful job the moition is there and the pain can be felt. Beautiful and somber. Very well done deary

[For Who I Am]

I beleive the character in this poem believed that her life should end. Were there 2 characters there./

[Stefanie Holmes]

This is emotionally heart-wrenching SSADD! You penned the emotions with such truth and conviction. Well done!

~Stefanie

[MsJewel]

I could feel the emotion in your words. Your poetry keeps getting better and better! Wonderful use of imagery. Great writing my friend!

:) Julie

[Utkarsh Singh]

ssadd...........was she really a girl or some ghost........?? btw nice poem .....imagination is wonderful........and full of emotions ....loved it brother