HERE I AM

Here I am, for my promises 

The day which I have rises 

In darkened nights.

Mocking nights and jibed stars

I am alone, what for? 

Though you are bright-

In my heart every moment

and faint-

Your voice, your smile.

Author's Note

It is incomplete poetry, but want to know what you think. Please review it honestly.

Reviews

[just Penny]

Haha, I like the cartoon at the beginning :) Your poem has a good concept but sometimes the English needs a bit of work (like "what for's" which should be "what for"). I truly admire anyone who writes poetry in any other language as it's a hard thing to do. I like your last line - works well :)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear, it is great suggestion, must be work on my illness. I do that because of rhythm.

[Jennie Baron]

I think you received good advice from Penny above. Having read several of your poems, I love the sentiment and the imagery, but the translation into English gets a little confusing. Of course it is difficult to write in another language and I would utterly fail at it! That will only come with getting more comfortable with the language. I'll watch to see how you progress.

[Penny]

Hey penny! You are a replica. I am the original one...
Rofl.

[just Penny]

Another Penny ? lol ...Hi :)

[Jewel Chanda]

nice work.. enjoyed it really :)

[Saddam]

Great thanks dear friend.

[Sami Khalil]

"In my heart every moment

and faint-

Your voice, your smile."




Now are you that duck in the pic hunted by love??? A wonderful write...:).............

[Saddam]

Thank you soooo much sir. It is nice. I feel real happiness.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...Any time...:).........................

[Vidya Bacchus]

Nice picture Ssadd lol.Life is a befuddling thing as is love.Indeed "what now ?"

[Saddam]

Thank you very much dear.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome hunny :)

[Tina Louise UK]

Love the pic...great piece hun :) x

[Saddam]

I found it from google. Thank you, sweetie.

[Frieda P]

I like it as is....the pic made me giggle, but it signifies that confusion and befuddlement of life, love and the entanglements of relationships in one fell swoop of your pen.

[Saddam]

This is true poet view, you knew what is made for. Thank you very much.