MY CRAZINESS

MY CRAZINESS  "

 

……….BY SADDAM HUSEN

 

 

Is it my craziness!
You are not here, at eventide
but you are with me, by my side.

 

Darkness is here, dilapidation lights
Coral dawning sun, smiling
and ogling on me, as saying -"Illusion is now over."

 

Lydian and Dalian shy winds
gyrating at me, as susurrus to me
"Feel your girl over here, catchy."

 

Amazingly I can feel her hand over my face
sliding over and again wobbling

Warm blow of her and sweet mist;
but open eyes, there were stars--
Moon with mini transparent clouds.

ã"v"ã

Reviews

Not one of my favorites of yours... but I can understand what you are trying to convey... its like you were in a hurry to get this one out or... the emotion was so big you were struggling a bit... I do see great hope for it to evolve as your other writing has often stirred me...

[Eve Ola]

great poem with very beautiful ending. well done

[Sreenath]

wow... nice piece i could see the feel that tenderness that freshness ... especially the last lines is the hope that "she" slides the hands over face.but when you open eyes it remains fantasy. it gives strong message that you wont always get the things you dream about.. nice and crisp. enjoyed reading it........peace
.keep smiling :)

[Rene Salinas]

I have confessed openly how one of my many downfalls other than the obvious ones is that I get distracted by images. At times I think I am just stupid but if poetry wants to "come out" and a few lines you want to share, then everything that it is portrayed, in my view, I assume it to be conncious. Orange big banners.... Ok Lets agree that the next is Calypso? Telling me it is a sonnet. Ok... 14 lines with a strict rhyming pattern let me see 1,2 .. I will stop my stupidity there but how about if no information was offered and someone wrote back to you saying "Nice sonnet"? I will leave that there...

And in the evening you seem to have a moment of awakening and hence the illusion is over but the company of that loved one seems to compleo you, or who you want to be. Let's hope it is reciprocated. Then there is a ver ywarm descriptive allusion to touch which no doubt felt like caressing and when the dream state is over you are brought back to be re - united with our allways giving celestial friends.

It sounds to me like a definite moment of inspiration.

Thankyou

[priya]

Sometimes your craziness becomes your passion and your passion the reason of your craziness. Beautifully written SSADD.

[sharonlee]

I find this thought provoking... fabulous word-imagery. Bravo

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

WOW, stunning write, I loved it. Brilliantly written.

Kaze~ :-)

[melissa]

This is awesome poem keep up the great work i can't wait to read more keep them coming

[Radhika]

Beautiful poem ; creates scenic imagination in mind !

[Saddam]

Great thanks to you dear.

[MsJewel]

Sad and beautiful. The images you create are lovely. As always, a pleasure to read "you"

:) Julie

[Saddam]

Good to hear you my friend. It feels so good. Thank you very much.

[Tina Louise UK]

Wonderfully done my friend :) x

[Saddam]

Thank you very much dear friend.